for Two Shots7/21/2004 c1 
6Nickety
The bolded hard has a great effect. I actually felt it! Hard - bam! into my chest. Or something.
Let's see, what else. Imagery is great, though detail seems lacking (I think that's the style of the poem, though).
I loved how the entire poem was basically containing a very short moment. Powerful.
That's it.
P.S. Otis Redding is the best! Dead! Singer! Ever!
6NicketyThe bolded hard has a great effect. I actually felt it! Hard - bam! into my chest. Or something.
Let's see, what else. Imagery is great, though detail seems lacking (I think that's the style of the poem, though).
I loved how the entire poem was basically containing a very short moment. Powerful.
That's it.
P.S. Otis Redding is the best! Dead! Singer! Ever!