for Where Do You Stand?11/14/2004 c1 
6N47R3
no one should have to act a fool to get attention from their friends. friends are there for each other and should help each other carry their burdens, not add to them. how many people help You carry Your burdens? and how many do You let help?
6N47R3no one should have to act a fool to get attention from their friends. friends are there for each other and should help each other carry their burdens, not add to them. how many people help You carry Your burdens? and how many do You let help?
7/5/2004 c1 126swift sky silver
good question. (i consider it to be since i can't answer it) you make a good point =0)
126swift sky silvergood question. (i consider it to be since i can't answer it) you make a good point =0)
6/5/2004 c1 31Teacup Majoram
No offense, but this seems only like a raw feeling written down, not a true poem. It's more like...the begginning of a poem. Poems start as a raw emotion and is polished into an art, and the poet, or the "artist" is always in the process of revising. I'm not trying to preach to you about poetry, or be offensive, it's just that I like people to help me revise my poetry, and I'm just trying to help others with the limited knowledge I have. If you could turn this feeling, and idea you have, and turn it into poetry, maybe with some rhyme of meter, more "poetic language" or something else that draws the reader in.
31Teacup MajoramNo offense, but this seems only like a raw feeling written down, not a true poem. It's more like...the begginning of a poem. Poems start as a raw emotion and is polished into an art, and the poet, or the "artist" is always in the process of revising. I'm not trying to preach to you about poetry, or be offensive, it's just that I like people to help me revise my poetry, and I'm just trying to help others with the limited knowledge I have. If you could turn this feeling, and idea you have, and turn it into poetry, maybe with some rhyme of meter, more "poetic language" or something else that draws the reader in.