9/4/2016 c15 7gulistala
Wow so all that had to happen was that someone who was a lot friendlier had to drink from her so that those two assholes didn't rape her?! What kind of twisted crap is that that no legal system couldn't charge those pricks with? Are vamps running the world? Surely there's something against that? I'm sick of sexist crap like this, as if a girl needs a saviour and is bound by a man and has to be drank from against her will? Wow. I know this is just a story but surely in this universe those two pricks get their comeuppance? I really blood hope so. This is otherwise not fair at all and does not seem to fit the 'moderness' of the story.

9/4/2016 c9 gulistala
So I wonder if the next chapter is Avery's funeral and Jamnis's imprisonment. Hmm.

9/7/2015 c35 2Ray-Anne
This was rather nice. I had a few small critics when I began it, but really by the end they mostly worked themselves out (as far as the technical things). You were right, you really progressed as a writer. It was a cutr storu with a great cast ofcharacters that disnt fet confusing. I am still kind of confused about the magic but I chalk that up to me needing to reread the parts. My only thing then was the relationship with the protagonist and ... Well everyone. The only one that felt sincere was with her friend. I didn't really understand her romantic relationship (how it started, why she was attracted to him) much less why it was so easy to go from him dating her friend to dating her. Real life? That takes conversation, analyzing - even when their (her friends and the fellow) relationship isn't deep you still ask about it. I feel like I wish I knew why they were together more. It just seemed odd. I also never fully understood her relationship with her family. I too am slightly estranged from a single member that on the outside doesn't make much sense - so that didn't bother me. But as estranged as I am from them, and it does mean I moved across country and don't visit - I still didn't abandon my other family members. I don't fully understand why you can up and leave no guilt and I'm not sure her hatred made that kind of sense for such an extreme response.

But small things really, especially because those things are rather per reader. To another it would have maybe made more sense

Lovely writing

5/22/2013 c7 nli
It's not romantic with his occasional girlfriend sitting right next to him - just skeezy.

12/27/2012 c35 9Binkybaby
Loved it

2/19/2012 c14 Shirou Okawa
Not aweful but awesome

2/18/2012 c12 Shirou Okawa
This is going to be an awkward car ride. lol.