for Light Bringer7/12/2004 c5 Zeroxmachine
This story keeps getting better and better, althougth there's a large amount of background information to take in. PLease hurry with the 6th Chapter.
This story keeps getting better and better, althougth there's a large amount of background information to take in. PLease hurry with the 6th Chapter.
7/3/2004 c1 Bleachedclouds
Hola darling!
I've only read the intro... Because well... I'm a lazy bitch =b
I also promised several people I'd work on Morningstar... *cough*
It's good. You've improved loads since the last peice of yours I read... Which is why it took so long for me to get around to reading this. Your last one was good. it just didn't really hold my interest though.
This was good though. I did get a bit confused by the sheer amount of names used here... @_@ But i AM tired =b
I'm chuffed you're influenced by MS so much but did you reeally have to steal my chapter naming scheme? And I used Freja first dammit
So yeah... I'll come read the rest later...
Just one more thing.. (And this is going to sound harsh) change your author bio. It makes you sound like an idiot. And i know some of mine have been pretty redundant in the past but 'plz' no way... Also you have room in your summary to put 'please' review instead of 'plz review' Change it. It makes you look like one of those talentless wannabes. And I don't want any friend of mine to seem like that ^^
Keep up the god work darling.. I'm going to stop procrastinating Now!
Hola darling!
I've only read the intro... Because well... I'm a lazy bitch =b
I also promised several people I'd work on Morningstar... *cough*
It's good. You've improved loads since the last peice of yours I read... Which is why it took so long for me to get around to reading this. Your last one was good. it just didn't really hold my interest though.
This was good though. I did get a bit confused by the sheer amount of names used here... @_@ But i AM tired =b
I'm chuffed you're influenced by MS so much but did you reeally have to steal my chapter naming scheme? And I used Freja first dammit
So yeah... I'll come read the rest later...
Just one more thing.. (And this is going to sound harsh) change your author bio. It makes you sound like an idiot. And i know some of mine have been pretty redundant in the past but 'plz' no way... Also you have room in your summary to put 'please' review instead of 'plz review' Change it. It makes you look like one of those talentless wannabes. And I don't want any friend of mine to seem like that ^^
Keep up the god work darling.. I'm going to stop procrastinating Now!
6/15/2004 c3 Hydrian
The new chapter has a little more gore than expected. It's good but next time can you put a lil more emphasis when you say "a bit bloody"?
The new chapter has a little more gore than expected. It's good but next time can you put a lil more emphasis when you say "a bit bloody"?
6/11/2004 c2 theatreoftheabsurd
Wow, update already! I'm so glad you fixed the formatting, it's a brilliant story. I can't wait to see where it's going. August is definitely one of my favourite characters, alongside Frejya... and I'm beginning to like Taboo, too. A few hints to character backstory, coming in, I see... I love finding out about that.
Hmm... I have a feeling Cole will be back... (cole is a favourite name of mine ^_^)
Update soon!
- sofi x
Wow, update already! I'm so glad you fixed the formatting, it's a brilliant story. I can't wait to see where it's going. August is definitely one of my favourite characters, alongside Frejya... and I'm beginning to like Taboo, too. A few hints to character backstory, coming in, I see... I love finding out about that.
Hmm... I have a feeling Cole will be back... (cole is a favourite name of mine ^_^)
Update soon!
- sofi x
6/11/2004 c1 Hydrian
This is good. The characters are somewhat realistic and resemble some aspects like Anime. That, or I've been watching too much TV. Can't wait till the next chapter.
P.S. I REVIEWED! ARE YOU HAPPY NOW!
This is good. The characters are somewhat realistic and resemble some aspects like Anime. That, or I've been watching too much TV. Can't wait till the next chapter.
P.S. I REVIEWED! ARE YOU HAPPY NOW!
6/11/2004 c2 
1Pellucid Serendipity
Oy! YOU! *points to the author* UPDATE!
Ahem, beside that point there, I really like the idea of the story.
Kenji: She doesn't plot out her stories either *snikers*
Right. I plot every now and then, but I like to see what happens next instead of planning it all the way out and haveing to make something happen.
Love the character names! it's so hard to think of a good name that starts with an 'X'. And August sounds like a certain someone I know...
Kenji: HEY! I offered to read this with you! It's not my fault you decided to sit in my lap!
...I'll deal with you later. Please update soon!
1Pellucid SerendipityOy! YOU! *points to the author* UPDATE!
Ahem, beside that point there, I really like the idea of the story.
Kenji: She doesn't plot out her stories either *snikers*
Right. I plot every now and then, but I like to see what happens next instead of planning it all the way out and haveing to make something happen.
Love the character names! it's so hard to think of a good name that starts with an 'X'. And August sounds like a certain someone I know...
Kenji: HEY! I offered to read this with you! It's not my fault you decided to sit in my lap!
...I'll deal with you later. Please update soon!
6/10/2004 c1 6venefican
Do you want me to add the next chapter? I've completed it^^ I added an explanation
6veneficanDo you want me to add the next chapter? I've completed it^^ I added an explanation
6/10/2004 c1 theatreoftheabsurd
Ha, I knew it was going to be a good one. Well, this is much easier to read. :D Sounds really interesting so far- a LOT of mysterious hints and possible plotlines introduced here... Freyja's a great character so far- one of the best parts was the conversation with her father- it flowed very well and the tension was clearly evident between them. I like August- he reminds me of a certain friend of mine :P You also created a, excellently ominous picture of Kalani.
I think we could do with a brief, clear run-through of the political situation. You've given a lot of information in dialogue, and that's fine, it was just quite broken up by the social interactions between characters. Confused little me would just like it clarified. *looks hopefully at you*
I love your names. Simple, unusual, and memorable. Just the way I like it. (i need everything simple, believe me.)
Oh, and the guy with the blue dreads sounds interesting. I've always wanted blue hair- and i like grey eyes... :P
Great start! Update soon!
- sofi x
Ha, I knew it was going to be a good one. Well, this is much easier to read. :D Sounds really interesting so far- a LOT of mysterious hints and possible plotlines introduced here... Freyja's a great character so far- one of the best parts was the conversation with her father- it flowed very well and the tension was clearly evident between them. I like August- he reminds me of a certain friend of mine :P You also created a, excellently ominous picture of Kalani.
I think we could do with a brief, clear run-through of the political situation. You've given a lot of information in dialogue, and that's fine, it was just quite broken up by the social interactions between characters. Confused little me would just like it clarified. *looks hopefully at you*
I love your names. Simple, unusual, and memorable. Just the way I like it. (i need everything simple, believe me.)
Oh, and the guy with the blue dreads sounds interesting. I've always wanted blue hair- and i like grey eyes... :P
Great start! Update soon!
- sofi x