for Losing You11/20/2004 c1 
1R.Valaina
That was beautiful. You're very talented. I can't write poems. Please r/r my story and keep up the great work!
1R.ValainaThat was beautiful. You're very talented. I can't write poems. Please r/r my story and keep up the great work!
8/1/2004 c1 81daphnegray78
Wow. Very powerful poem...and with a great lesson behind it. Great work. :o)
~Daphne~
81daphnegray78Wow. Very powerful poem...and with a great lesson behind it. Great work. :o)
~Daphne~
7/26/2004 c1 5chibichan366
so sad. you're right, alcohol does ruin your life. it not only destroys you, it destroys the people who care about you. your poem really illustrated that lost emotion. i like it.
5chibichan366so sad. you're right, alcohol does ruin your life. it not only destroys you, it destroys the people who care about you. your poem really illustrated that lost emotion. i like it.
6/20/2004 c1 7Tainted Tears
Yeah, I wish my Dad could understand what beer really does to him...
Anyway, this is a pretty good read. Slowly losing someone because of beer is something a lot of folks can relate to. My Dad is finally taking some control over his drinking, and I'm helping him with it, so it's getting better.
Enough blabbering, this is a good perspective. Awesome job!
- Tainted Tears
P. S. THANKS FOR THE REVIEW! ^_^
7Tainted TearsYeah, I wish my Dad could understand what beer really does to him...
Anyway, this is a pretty good read. Slowly losing someone because of beer is something a lot of folks can relate to. My Dad is finally taking some control over his drinking, and I'm helping him with it, so it's getting better.
Enough blabbering, this is a good perspective. Awesome job!
- Tainted Tears
P. S. THANKS FOR THE REVIEW! ^_^
6/16/2004 c1 5LassieC
Very powerful. I like the use of rhyming, and the bit of suspence that is put in. Nice job!
5LassieCVery powerful. I like the use of rhyming, and the bit of suspence that is put in. Nice job!
6/15/2004 c1 robynD
nice. i liked how it rhymed and then stopped rhyming. kinda made it more powerful
but i dunno, this poem felt a little off in the cadence of it. you know, the rhythm. i guess that's because you were more focused on the emotions expressed in the poem than in the feeling of it... which i mean, is very important. a poem with a nice cadence but crappy message is just that, crap. so of the two, i'd take yours...
but i liked it all the same... good...
later days
luv bells
nice. i liked how it rhymed and then stopped rhyming. kinda made it more powerful
but i dunno, this poem felt a little off in the cadence of it. you know, the rhythm. i guess that's because you were more focused on the emotions expressed in the poem than in the feeling of it... which i mean, is very important. a poem with a nice cadence but crappy message is just that, crap. so of the two, i'd take yours...
but i liked it all the same... good...
later days
luv bells