6/14/2004 c1 17the mouse that roared
Wow. Very poetic and beautiful. I hope you stop feeling so depressed soon, though I know it's because you're missing your boyfriend. Maybe you can have fun without him...? No, no I guess you can't.
A few sentences were choppy/fragments, especially at the beginning, but it was very well-written.
Favorite lines:
This ground melts away, so I'm not sure how I'm still standing, but it matters so little there's no reason to question it.
Like a child's water color painting, made lovingly in art class, that's been rained on while she walked home.
You've made the world I once knew dissipate and evaporate. Simply because nothing else matters. Only you. Only us. You and I alone can make this place meaningless or meaningful.
Writer's blood. Flowing not from aching wrists that long for the moment she snaps and grabs for the razor blade, but from a simple ballpoint pen.
The soul may pour out of a body through their veins, or through their fingertips, the pen, and captured on the paper.
Lying there, silent lonely tears soaking into the tan pattern of the pillow, turning black as they mix with eyeliner and mascara on the way down.
Nothing gives me peace, except the solitude and darkness and wondrous freedom of sleep. Slumber stealing time away, time I wish would go ever faster, until the day I go home to you. Then my mind may find its peace and tranquility and happiness in consciousness.
I would say more, but I have finals and an essay and all sorts of very fun stuff to do. So... later...

6/14/2004 c1 30tastes like love
Very good. R&R mine?