for Isolde's Seven9/13/2008 c1 
17pinkfairyfloss
this is such a beautiful poem
i love how each line flows so well into the next and the rhyming is awesome (im jelous of those who can rhyme as mine never seems to work right :/)
great writing
x.pff
17pinkfairyflossthis is such a beautiful poem
i love how each line flows so well into the next and the rhyming is awesome (im jelous of those who can rhyme as mine never seems to work right :/)
great writing
x.pff
9/12/2008 c1 10Justin Vengeance
Right back at you, I love your ending. I think I would like to see some different stanzas, maybe a new one each time the word seven appears. Speaking of which, I love the use of the seven in this. Nicely done.
And just to answer your question, a tanka has no repetition or rhyming just like a haiku except longer. I like to make unexpected like breaks like this:
line1
line2
line3
line4
line5
etc.
So sometimes I'm more of a traditional guy, but others I'm not, lol
10Justin VengeanceRight back at you, I love your ending. I think I would like to see some different stanzas, maybe a new one each time the word seven appears. Speaking of which, I love the use of the seven in this. Nicely done.
And just to answer your question, a tanka has no repetition or rhyming just like a haiku except longer. I like to make unexpected like breaks like this:
line1
line2
line3
line4
line5
etc.
So sometimes I'm more of a traditional guy, but others I'm not, lol
9/10/2008 c1 May Elizabeth
I love this for so many reasons, I like the flow, tone, and the vivid imagery. Good job. :D Peace.
I love this for so many reasons, I like the flow, tone, and the vivid imagery. Good job. :D Peace.
10/13/2007 c1 31Asphodelus
I love the tone of this, really beautiful.
I dunno why but the last verse reminds me of "Bleed It Out" by Linkin Park.
31AsphodelusI love the tone of this, really beautiful.
I dunno why but the last verse reminds me of "Bleed It Out" by Linkin Park.
10/3/2007 c1 30life on rewind
Oh, originality on a normally ruined idea! &favourites for you!
Punctuation. It expresses places where you want the reader to pause and helps with flow and metre. If you dislike using punctuation, I respect that, but if you’re open to comments then maybe you should consider this one!
If you don't like using punctuation in poems, I 'pologise. I feel it's essential, so I tend to nitpick it ...
Thank you for posting this! Maybe you wouldn’t mind checking out a few of my writings too if you feel like it and liked the review? If you do, I recommend my rants. I hope the concrit helped!
Sakura.
[Yes, I copy/paste most of my reviews. So sue me. The concrit changes per review, and you get tips, right? Win/win situation. End of.]
30life on rewindOh, originality on a normally ruined idea! &favourites for you!
Punctuation. It expresses places where you want the reader to pause and helps with flow and metre. If you dislike using punctuation, I respect that, but if you’re open to comments then maybe you should consider this one!
If you don't like using punctuation in poems, I 'pologise. I feel it's essential, so I tend to nitpick it ...
Thank you for posting this! Maybe you wouldn’t mind checking out a few of my writings too if you feel like it and liked the review? If you do, I recommend my rants. I hope the concrit helped!
Sakura.
[Yes, I copy/paste most of my reviews. So sue me. The concrit changes per review, and you get tips, right? Win/win situation. End of.]
9/28/2007 c1 Arafax
Loved the word use in this piece. The rhyming was good as well. Keep up the good work.
~Arafax~
Loved the word use in this piece. The rhyming was good as well. Keep up the good work.
~Arafax~
9/20/2007 c1 29McKenzie Drestire
The rythem was strong an fluid, it was a pleasure to read because it was so effortless in it's form. Amazing job.
Peaceout, kenzie
29McKenzie DrestireThe rythem was strong an fluid, it was a pleasure to read because it was so effortless in it's form. Amazing job.
Peaceout, kenzie
9/20/2007 c1 10asdf will
Rhyme schemes, rhyme schemes! I love 'em, yet I have trouble creating them. Good job, keep up the work.
10asdf willRhyme schemes, rhyme schemes! I love 'em, yet I have trouble creating them. Good job, keep up the work.
9/18/2007 c1 Counting Petals
It rhymed, but at the same time it didn't sound simplistic like it would if I tried the same thing. I also really liked the flow, and the imagery, too. (Which you've probably gotten a lot of, but it's for a reason.)
It rhymed, but at the same time it didn't sound simplistic like it would if I tried the same thing. I also really liked the flow, and the imagery, too. (Which you've probably gotten a lot of, but it's for a reason.)
9/17/2007 c1 21wecouldgoandget40s
This is really good. It sets a really calm, mellow mood. And that's not a bad thing ;)
Wow. This was really great to read. You really should write more stuff like this. Later, then.
21wecouldgoandget40sThis is really good. It sets a really calm, mellow mood. And that's not a bad thing ;)
Wow. This was really great to read. You really should write more stuff like this. Later, then.
9/16/2007 c1 60xfail
I really like the ideas in this. Poetry that makes me think is always an enjoyment, and this is certainly worth another read. I especially liked the flow of the last stanza. Good job on this!
60xfailI really like the ideas in this. Poetry that makes me think is always an enjoyment, and this is certainly worth another read. I especially liked the flow of the last stanza. Good job on this!
9/15/2007 c1 21Heroh
I can't explain how aazing I thought this poem was.. This is going into my favs :D I just know I'm going to want to read this over and over again. I love how thought provoking this is :)
21HerohI can't explain how aazing I thought this poem was.. This is going into my favs :D I just know I'm going to want to read this over and over again. I love how thought provoking this is :)
8/12/2005 c1 37TalkingMime
I liked the rhymes and how everything flowed nicely. Actaully while I was reading it, I couldn't help but feel like I was in English class again trying to dissect some famous and beautifully written work. But as a result I couldn't help but feel that I missed something after every line, a reference to some book, or a metaphor, or some symbolism, or...In any case, wonderful job. Beautiful poem.
37TalkingMimeI liked the rhymes and how everything flowed nicely. Actaully while I was reading it, I couldn't help but feel like I was in English class again trying to dissect some famous and beautifully written work. But as a result I couldn't help but feel that I missed something after every line, a reference to some book, or a metaphor, or some symbolism, or...In any case, wonderful job. Beautiful poem.