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6/29/2004 c1 29Katterree Fengari
that's really good, I think. I like the rhyming style, but it looks like you would of said something better, in places, except that you were trying to make it rhyme. Like on "Never did I think,/ feelings could shrink," Shrink doesn't quite fit, I dunno.
Also, I don't think those lines fit into the poem...it's like something you brought up, but you really didn't explain it.
6/19/2004 c1 15littlemarenengh
wow! that was powerful! lol..really...you have to keep writing! geez... it blew me away!
great job
~maren~
6/19/2004 c1 WarriorHeart
Incredible!
6/19/2004 c1 112suey and liuey
i think you mean waste?
not bad though.
6/19/2004 c1 22The Missing Spoon
I think you meant "waste"-at first I thought your use of "waist" could be a play on words, but it doesn't really work as such.
6/19/2004 c1 5On Mercury
that poem was very short and bitter, i liked it. it conveyed a lot of emotion. good work!
OM
6/19/2004 c1 3Cry Tears of Darkness
wow... deep... dont give into cutting, its a horrid addiction you cant stop. trust me. nice rhyming ;)

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