for Piggy in the Middle8/12/2004 c1 
12Mirrorwind
I love the title and I really like the beginning. (Is that spelled right?) It was very interesting and powerful, and I really like the title. The ending two lines were also very good. However, I feel like some of the momentum was lost when you reached "No good enough." It just seemed so unpoetic to say "You're a worthless piece of crap" especially after your great beginning. It just seemed to me like it changed from prose to simply ranting. However, you have a really great idea, a great beginning, and a great end. It could just be my personal taste in the middle. An over-all very good poem.
12MirrorwindI love the title and I really like the beginning. (Is that spelled right?) It was very interesting and powerful, and I really like the title. The ending two lines were also very good. However, I feel like some of the momentum was lost when you reached "No good enough." It just seemed so unpoetic to say "You're a worthless piece of crap" especially after your great beginning. It just seemed to me like it changed from prose to simply ranting. However, you have a really great idea, a great beginning, and a great end. It could just be my personal taste in the middle. An over-all very good poem.