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12/8/2005 c1 6Sidra A Kollers
Gorgeous poem, I love your style. It was very visual.
10/17/2005 c1 19DiffusedBlues
You are a mere memory here you areNo more than a ghost now you Moved on since seventeen A veteran poet who took to the world youNever came back but wondered who took to the sea of expression...

~Impressionsofaleg
8/1/2005 c1 5Rainbow Fingers
Another amazing piece. It was morbid and beatiful. Loved it, especially the 'Cracked lips, sandpaper tongue' I don't know why, but I really like the line. And of course the ending, which tied everything. Nicely done.
7/23/2005 c1 17aries-diva-JC
haunting... love d flow, how u would say 'she' and then say what she was on the next line... fantastic job...
5/8/2005 c1 do not resuscitate
amazing imagery and word choice. stunning poetry.
4/28/2005 c1 40SilverSpinner
Oh wow...powerful...I really like it. "She is knife hipbones she is sharp ribs, sharper nails, animal inside her belly clawing at nothing..." I like how the lines seem mixed up but it all makes so much sense. Amazing work.
12/18/2004 c1 90poetic abortion
;_; This was a beautiful poem.

~ Noelle ~
12/18/2004 c1 84this is my love for you
Wow... powerful stuff.
12/6/2004 c1 11Helxine
very expressive
11/4/2004 c1 14Kitty-brdg
*claps* very good. I liked this mucho.
9/19/2004 c1 56AsianScaper
I love how you've put the poem together and how also, it is fragmented. As though the persona is pausing to think, realizing some truth after the space of each line, only to spout some words and stop again.
However, for all the negative and dark images, she holds seduction in her grasp and not matter how hollow her voice, can still speak with what is physical in her.
Well, as a reader, that's what I've read from the poem. And the bias is there, for I love images. Keep the wonderful writing up! It's always a warm feeling at the pit of my stomach to see good poetry about. Cheers!
8/29/2004 c1 74Etheral
O0o0o0o0o0o .. i like. Wonderful job!
8/7/2004 c1 55APersonAndAHalf
Woah...don't know how to review this other than saying this was beyond my capability to review...
7/28/2004 c1 jack c. weller
Honest with powerful metaphors.
7/23/2004 c1 Nita
Oh, I really like this one. The lack of punctuation is really effective - gives it a desperate, frenzied sort of feel that's kind of overwhelming. (But in a very good way.) 'she is Death with a made-up face' - I love that. Very striking, perfectly done. :)
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