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7/4/2004 c1 orangesI really like the repetition- and the broken pattern at the end, it suggests a bigger problem... if that makes sense. =]
6/26/2004 c1 
7suzibeanThat's shocking and moving and honest. I really liked the repetition, it emphasised the actions without ever really naming them. Incredible.
6/24/2004 c1 7AethraZipI've never burned myself, but for awhile I was a pretty bad cutter. So.
The refrain of thump burn thump burn works very well. Congrats to you and all that stuff. Um.. yeah. This is why I don't normally review poems.
~Zippy
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