for Wild Desire3/21/2005 c2 Guest
do u realise how many times u say "smirked"? i mean, come on... u need some synonyms... it gets VERY repetitive
do u realise how many times u say "smirked"? i mean, come on... u need some synonyms... it gets VERY repetitive
3/5/2005 c2 
1x-Krys-x
wow! this is a really awesome story! The beginning actually reminds me of something that happened with me and one of my friends... well, the liking eachother part... keep going! update soon!
1x-Krys-xwow! this is a really awesome story! The beginning actually reminds me of something that happened with me and one of my friends... well, the liking eachother part... keep going! update soon!
8/1/2004 c1 5Jahar
very cool. Usually, the slashes are males, but this was a nice change. Like how you got into the detail. Can't wait for more!
5Jaharvery cool. Usually, the slashes are males, but this was a nice change. Like how you got into the detail. Can't wait for more!
7/19/2004 c2 28Gir Garcia
*clears her throat* that was very intresting. i liked it a lot. i like how u went into details. keep up the good work.
28Gir Garcia*clears her throat* that was very intresting. i liked it a lot. i like how u went into details. keep up the good work.
7/19/2004 c2 someone
keep going, plz
i beg you
mikaela still hasnt gotten it
keep going, plz
i beg you
mikaela still hasnt gotten it
7/18/2004 c1 28Gir Garcia
i would like to read more of this...plesae continue. can't wait for some more
28Gir Garciai would like to read more of this...plesae continue. can't wait for some more
7/17/2004 c1 Neko
Very nice chapter plz update soon!
Very nice chapter plz update soon!
7/7/2004 c1 eahlay
Good story. Had me reading. I love the little details you put in about the lips and such...please update soon.
Good story. Had me reading. I love the little details you put in about the lips and such...please update soon.
6/29/2004 c1 Caitlyn
wow. i really liked it. =). can't wait for the next chapter. so hurry up and write write write !
wow. i really liked it. =). can't wait for the next chapter. so hurry up and write write write !
6/29/2004 c1 24Psycho Teddy
Not a bad effort there mate. Some of your sentence structure in the first few paragraphs was a bit all over the place, but you seemed to come good later on in the piece. A little careful editing could sort out any errors in this, and make it absolutely perfect. It did seem to finish a little abrubtly though, perhaps a sequel? Very well written for such a touchy subject. Well done. :)
24Psycho TeddyNot a bad effort there mate. Some of your sentence structure in the first few paragraphs was a bit all over the place, but you seemed to come good later on in the piece. A little careful editing could sort out any errors in this, and make it absolutely perfect. It did seem to finish a little abrubtly though, perhaps a sequel? Very well written for such a touchy subject. Well done. :)