for Western Warrior8/15/2004 c1 
11Misoshiru
this is seriously good! i think you should add on to it, it would make such a cool story! u may say i am biased coz i LOVE japanese stories and i prolly am but it would turn out to be so good!
11Misoshiruthis is seriously good! i think you should add on to it, it would make such a cool story! u may say i am biased coz i LOVE japanese stories and i prolly am but it would turn out to be so good!
7/22/2004 c1 22Loki Mischeif-Maker
Not bad. An interesting take on the samurai idea. Though, in the one huge paragraph, you really need to make a new one every time somebody speaks. And your PoV drifted around a bit.
All in all though, awesome story.
Cheers!
22Loki Mischeif-MakerNot bad. An interesting take on the samurai idea. Though, in the one huge paragraph, you really need to make a new one every time somebody speaks. And your PoV drifted around a bit.
All in all though, awesome story.
Cheers!