for Heavy Limbs, Mortal4/17/2005 c3 
12The Phoenix King
This is really good, very Norse sounding. The only comments I have to make is that you could break up the dialogue more(Seperate lines) and also that you might wish to add more descriptions to your writing. Apart from that however, I like it. The names are really good.
The Phoenix King"Rise from the ashes"
12The Phoenix KingThis is really good, very Norse sounding. The only comments I have to make is that you could break up the dialogue more(Seperate lines) and also that you might wish to add more descriptions to your writing. Apart from that however, I like it. The names are really good.
The Phoenix King"Rise from the ashes"
11/5/2004 c1 13whatdreamsmaycome
Great start for a story...all the names are tounge-twisters, but that's ok; you're creating a whole new world here, and your'er entitled to choosing whatever names you desire.
13whatdreamsmaycomeGreat start for a story...all the names are tounge-twisters, but that's ok; you're creating a whole new world here, and your'er entitled to choosing whatever names you desire.
7/1/2004 c1 15Tempest Epilogue
Interesting beginning, if a bit short. I am quite fond of Norse myth, so this is especially interesting. I like the idea of using the wind to take them to the wizard dude. :)
~ Hencellina
15Tempest EpilogueInteresting beginning, if a bit short. I am quite fond of Norse myth, so this is especially interesting. I like the idea of using the wind to take them to the wizard dude. :)
~ Hencellina