for The Demise of a Reflection10/4/2005 c1 
18Plinky
Wow. This is incredible. Really, really good. I love the voice in italics. I don't know exactly who it is, but I'm sure it's meant to be that way. The ending was really good. I love the way that ... how do I explain it? ... It's almost as if the reader sees it from the inside and the outside. We see the way it must seem to him, but we also see what she went through. This is amazingly written, great emotion. Keep writing!
18PlinkyWow. This is incredible. Really, really good. I love the voice in italics. I don't know exactly who it is, but I'm sure it's meant to be that way. The ending was really good. I love the way that ... how do I explain it? ... It's almost as if the reader sees it from the inside and the outside. We see the way it must seem to him, but we also see what she went through. This is amazingly written, great emotion. Keep writing!
11/18/2004 c1 1Amican
Wow. I swear I'm normally quite articulate, but all I can say is, "Wow."
Nice work.
1AmicanWow. I swear I'm normally quite articulate, but all I can say is, "Wow."
Nice work.
9/14/2004 c1 36Windsong
Whoo! What an intense piece! Great, though. Only one criticism I have: After she says "help me love them," the italics guy (I think it's God) says "I AM" in all caps. Was that the way it was supposed to be? It makes it seem like he's irritated. Which, of course, doesn't fit God at all. Anyway.
Great piece. It really dragged you through the workings of the woman's mind. I enjoyed it thoroughly. Keep writing, Lomiel! -Windsong
36WindsongWhoo! What an intense piece! Great, though. Only one criticism I have: After she says "help me love them," the italics guy (I think it's God) says "I AM" in all caps. Was that the way it was supposed to be? It makes it seem like he's irritated. Which, of course, doesn't fit God at all. Anyway.
Great piece. It really dragged you through the workings of the woman's mind. I enjoyed it thoroughly. Keep writing, Lomiel! -Windsong
8/22/2004 c1 Rance Drai
Alright, I really like this. It is both well characterized and very good. I like both the medium and the message. You don't read very much good christian fiction. As a fellow believer, I hate to admit that a lot of christians write like dooky where God is concerned, but you do very well. This reminds me somewhat of a story I wrote called: "A Song for Easter Sunday." I am going to be posting it on my profile. I think you'd like it. I'd also appreciate your input on my main story The Second Advent of the Raven of Heaven. (please read a good ways into the story. The earlier parts were written a long time ago.)
Thanks,
Rance (More power to you) Drai
Alright, I really like this. It is both well characterized and very good. I like both the medium and the message. You don't read very much good christian fiction. As a fellow believer, I hate to admit that a lot of christians write like dooky where God is concerned, but you do very well. This reminds me somewhat of a story I wrote called: "A Song for Easter Sunday." I am going to be posting it on my profile. I think you'd like it. I'd also appreciate your input on my main story The Second Advent of the Raven of Heaven. (please read a good ways into the story. The earlier parts were written a long time ago.)
Thanks,
Rance (More power to you) Drai
7/26/2004 c1 2Queen of dawn
wow! i love your story very grippy for some reason, there is just something about it. I'm not going to bother critising cause i ain't good at it.
2Queen of dawnwow! i love your story very grippy for some reason, there is just something about it. I'm not going to bother critising cause i ain't good at it.
6/30/2004 c1 3Ahrihliir
Wow. This is an incredibly powerful story. I love the way you wrote it, part narrative, part dialogue. I really can't say much else, because I'm still thinking the story over.
3AhrihliirWow. This is an incredibly powerful story. I love the way you wrote it, part narrative, part dialogue. I really can't say much else, because I'm still thinking the story over.
6/29/2004 c1 9Nervous Neuron
Wow, this was one well written story! I'm glad she came to at the end. Keep up the good work :)
9Nervous NeuronWow, this was one well written story! I'm glad she came to at the end. Keep up the good work :)