for Shovel6/27/2005 c1 Faithiny
That was amazing. Your repetition of the line about the shovel helped with the idea that he's crazy. Excellent idea and you portrayed it very nicely. Well done!
That was amazing. Your repetition of the line about the shovel helped with the idea that he's crazy. Excellent idea and you portrayed it very nicely. Well done!
7/6/2004 c1 
2Tragic-slurpee
Excellent, and yes as the others have said it was indeed morbid. The details you added for the bathroom scene gave me a very vivid picture, very good.
2Tragic-slurpeeExcellent, and yes as the others have said it was indeed morbid. The details you added for the bathroom scene gave me a very vivid picture, very good.
7/6/2004 c1 Rabit157
Now that is scary! Thats two things and two shivers down the old spine there. works very well. Fabulously well actually. A bit like Golem in a way.
I think I've said it before but I certainly don't want to know what goes thorugh your head sometimes. Really!
Its like poetry in a way. Sorry I'm babbling now, but hey. I'll leave you before I write an essay. But keep writing and keep churning out good stuff!
Now that is scary! Thats two things and two shivers down the old spine there. works very well. Fabulously well actually. A bit like Golem in a way.
I think I've said it before but I certainly don't want to know what goes thorugh your head sometimes. Really!
Its like poetry in a way. Sorry I'm babbling now, but hey. I'll leave you before I write an essay. But keep writing and keep churning out good stuff!
7/5/2004 c1 4Liquid Gold
oh creepy, very creepy. i like it though. it is written very convincingly, frightening. the way you repeat the opening lines, scary. well done.
4Liquid Goldoh creepy, very creepy. i like it though. it is written very convincingly, frightening. the way you repeat the opening lines, scary. well done.