for Lisa the Disaster6/28/2005 c1 
25pandaluv11
I liked where you were going with this, it was well written and all, but I think the last stanza kinda ruins the mood you had going.
I understand the point of it, I just think it's abrupt and what not.
But I do like the theme of it all.
25pandaluv11I liked where you were going with this, it was well written and all, but I think the last stanza kinda ruins the mood you had going.
I understand the point of it, I just think it's abrupt and what not.
But I do like the theme of it all.
9/10/2004 c1 10raven.chole.lee
I love this. I absolutely love the way you portray the negative side of reality, it makes me reflect alot. Great job!
10raven.chole.leeI love this. I absolutely love the way you portray the negative side of reality, it makes me reflect alot. Great job!
8/22/2004 c1 25Kethry Jonas
The way you write isn't the poetic tongue, flourishing with captivating words, but the poetry of the harsh reality. I absolutely LOVE it. Especially THIS poem. Amazing.
25Kethry JonasThe way you write isn't the poetic tongue, flourishing with captivating words, but the poetry of the harsh reality. I absolutely LOVE it. Especially THIS poem. Amazing.
7/5/2004 c1 301sirius chatham
Very good, I like uit a lot. The ending could have been a little stronger, maybe.
The poem reminds me somewhat of "Sad Lisa" by Cat Stevens.
very good :)
cheers
sirius chatham
ps r/r my stuff too
301sirius chathamVery good, I like uit a lot. The ending could have been a little stronger, maybe.
The poem reminds me somewhat of "Sad Lisa" by Cat Stevens.
very good :)
cheers
sirius chatham
ps r/r my stuff too