for One Last Time10/20/2004 c1 
2philoslove
Woah, thought of a man trying to embrace his love who seems to be dead, or an empty shell, devoid of a soul. Powerful.
2philosloveWoah, thought of a man trying to embrace his love who seems to be dead, or an empty shell, devoid of a soul. Powerful.
8/12/2004 c1 Melissa Lea Night
another haiku done well. you have a good knack for doing these. it's takara: queen of nightmares btw. been a while will, good to see you're going well as a writer.
another haiku done well. you have a good knack for doing these. it's takara: queen of nightmares btw. been a while will, good to see you're going well as a writer.
7/30/2004 c1 David Stephen
These Haikus are simply sensational. They are very effective and work so well. Well done and keep on writing!
These Haikus are simply sensational. They are very effective and work so well. Well done and keep on writing!
7/21/2004 c1 17Ravena Storm
I know my comment on 'Perish in Silence' wasn't exactly nice. Ok it wasn't nice at all but I was being honest which is what you asked people to do. I'm sorry I didn't say what was good about it but I didn't read enough of it to do so. That was a mistake on my part, I apologise for that. You are right to be hurt over it, people take comments differently. I didn't realise it would annoy you cuz I don't think it would bother me, but this isn't about me. Basically I'm saying sorry for how I said things. I could've been a lot nicer and subtle and added positive comments too. So yeah thats pretty much all I wanted to say.
About this piece though, it's nice. I rarely read Haiku (sp?) poems but I liked this one cuz it was simple but it held a lot inside it, especially with the present tenses on both the first and last lines as it shows how the speaker is almost holding onto memories rather than 'her'. Nice work =)
17Ravena StormI know my comment on 'Perish in Silence' wasn't exactly nice. Ok it wasn't nice at all but I was being honest which is what you asked people to do. I'm sorry I didn't say what was good about it but I didn't read enough of it to do so. That was a mistake on my part, I apologise for that. You are right to be hurt over it, people take comments differently. I didn't realise it would annoy you cuz I don't think it would bother me, but this isn't about me. Basically I'm saying sorry for how I said things. I could've been a lot nicer and subtle and added positive comments too. So yeah thats pretty much all I wanted to say.
About this piece though, it's nice. I rarely read Haiku (sp?) poems but I liked this one cuz it was simple but it held a lot inside it, especially with the present tenses on both the first and last lines as it shows how the speaker is almost holding onto memories rather than 'her'. Nice work =)
7/16/2004 c1 Bob'N'Cat
Nice poem. I have to say you did a good job at bringing out the emotion in it.
Nice poem. I have to say you did a good job at bringing out the emotion in it.
7/11/2004 c1 292Fabian Cortez
powerful and impactive, perfecty rounded piece.
Well Done
Keep Writing!
F.C
292Fabian Cortezpowerful and impactive, perfecty rounded piece.
Well Done
Keep Writing!
F.C