
9/4/2004 c1
32pointythings
This is really pretty. I like how you repeat "desperately divine." The rhyme scheme is really good too.

This is really pretty. I like how you repeat "desperately divine." The rhyme scheme is really good too.
7/20/2004 c1
99underjoyed
This is really pretty. I love "temptation oozes fine addiction". That's a very sensual line, methinks.
The whole thing's very sensual, in fact, and I love the nature imagery.

This is really pretty. I love "temptation oozes fine addiction". That's a very sensual line, methinks.
The whole thing's very sensual, in fact, and I love the nature imagery.
7/7/2004 c1
11Enchant'd
Well, you wished for me to read this, so I did, and, I have to admit I love it. It's just simply awesome. The third stanza's my favourite, especially the first line in that stanza. Oh yes, your rhyming's very good too.

Well, you wished for me to read this, so I did, and, I have to admit I love it. It's just simply awesome. The third stanza's my favourite, especially the first line in that stanza. Oh yes, your rhyming's very good too.
7/7/2004 c1
7Captain JT
Dear Megan,
Although I am already familiar with this one, I thought I might as well right a review, so you can have something in writing.
I did like this one, it was rather enjoyable. It seems a little obscure but the image that comes to mind is clear. Litterally, I imagine like the perfect photograph, colorful and vibrant. Unfortuately in still life is the only way I can imagine this world. It is too perfect for motion. I do like this, BUT I HATE the third stanza. Fix it, por favor. I really dont like it. Fine work though.
Jay

Dear Megan,
Although I am already familiar with this one, I thought I might as well right a review, so you can have something in writing.
I did like this one, it was rather enjoyable. It seems a little obscure but the image that comes to mind is clear. Litterally, I imagine like the perfect photograph, colorful and vibrant. Unfortuately in still life is the only way I can imagine this world. It is too perfect for motion. I do like this, BUT I HATE the third stanza. Fix it, por favor. I really dont like it. Fine work though.
Jay