for What Love, Whose Love9/4/2004 c1 
11Arien
I guess it was ok. i can't really gush over it since its really short (i know the myth is short and all, i'm not trying to bash your stuff) I think it was written pretty well though sort of in a summarized way. One thing i didnt like was that way you wrote why Echo was only allowed to speak the last words spoken by someone else. If I hadn't known this myth i think i might not have gotten what you were trying to say. And when Narcissus was talking it sounded like you were trying to word his sentences so that her sentences would sound more like someone was actually speaking to him instead of copying his words... if you get what I'm talking about.
Other than that all was good and groovy.
There's this dead guy, J.W. Waterhouse, that painted a picture of Echo and Narcissus that rocks. You should check it out. Why? Cuz, Waterhouse rocks! yeah, man... peash out!
11ArienI guess it was ok. i can't really gush over it since its really short (i know the myth is short and all, i'm not trying to bash your stuff) I think it was written pretty well though sort of in a summarized way. One thing i didnt like was that way you wrote why Echo was only allowed to speak the last words spoken by someone else. If I hadn't known this myth i think i might not have gotten what you were trying to say. And when Narcissus was talking it sounded like you were trying to word his sentences so that her sentences would sound more like someone was actually speaking to him instead of copying his words... if you get what I'm talking about.
Other than that all was good and groovy.
There's this dead guy, J.W. Waterhouse, that painted a picture of Echo and Narcissus that rocks. You should check it out. Why? Cuz, Waterhouse rocks! yeah, man... peash out!
7/16/2004 c1 22Loki Mischeif-Maker
Nice take on the myth, though I believe Narcissus was stupidas well as weird and thought his reflection was a girl. . . . ah, well. I don't mind f he's gay.
Love the idea, though you need to start a new paragraph with every piece of dialogue or really irritate some people. Otherwise, though, good.
Cheers!
22Loki Mischeif-MakerNice take on the myth, though I believe Narcissus was stupidas well as weird and thought his reflection was a girl. . . . ah, well. I don't mind f he's gay.
Love the idea, though you need to start a new paragraph with every piece of dialogue or really irritate some people. Otherwise, though, good.
Cheers!