for Left Alone10/13/2004 c1 
123Raya Dronaile
oh how pretty and dark. it rhymed wonderfully, and had such good rhythm. splendid poem!
123Raya Dronaileoh how pretty and dark. it rhymed wonderfully, and had such good rhythm. splendid poem!
9/7/2004 c1 00Anonymous00
This is one of the most poignant poems I've ever read. I like it a lot, and like the others, I loved the last 2 lines.
Finding true people are hard to find now-a-days and betrayals seems to be a trend. But as they say, keep your friends close, but keep your enemies closer.
I suppose the only thing you can say about things like these is that, "Shit happens. Leave me alone you assholes or I'm going to kill you!" (chuckles)
You'll be fine...and I'm sure you are now.
This is one of the most poignant poems I've ever read. I like it a lot, and like the others, I loved the last 2 lines.
Finding true people are hard to find now-a-days and betrayals seems to be a trend. But as they say, keep your friends close, but keep your enemies closer.
I suppose the only thing you can say about things like these is that, "Shit happens. Leave me alone you assholes or I'm going to kill you!" (chuckles)
You'll be fine...and I'm sure you are now.
8/1/2004 c1 Alex
Wow! Powerful stuff. Especially loved the analagy of gossip with "sweet and poisoned wine"
Wow! Powerful stuff. Especially loved the analagy of gossip with "sweet and poisoned wine"
7/27/2004 c1 81nesy
The last line, though different to the rest of them, is where emotion is clearly seen, because of the contrary words.
81nesyThe last line, though different to the rest of them, is where emotion is clearly seen, because of the contrary words.
7/23/2004 c1 Ericalyn
This is really good. I have experienced this more than once, so it touches me greatly. Thanks for putting my feelings into words. And thanks for the review!
This is really good. I have experienced this more than once, so it touches me greatly. Thanks for putting my feelings into words. And thanks for the review!
7/20/2004 c1 3Pont
One thing, second stanza, second line; 'I 'thing' I'll never know' should probably be 'think'. Just a suggestion ^_^
So sad... ;_; I love your metaphor at the end. I love your rhyme too. Some people are just so talented... ^_~
Happy writing! Keep up the great work!
~ponteh
3PontOne thing, second stanza, second line; 'I 'thing' I'll never know' should probably be 'think'. Just a suggestion ^_^
So sad... ;_; I love your metaphor at the end. I love your rhyme too. Some people are just so talented... ^_~
Happy writing! Keep up the great work!
~ponteh
7/17/2004 c1 40singingspeechless
oh! i so love this. i especially like the last stanza and the rythm. you were consistent the whole way through and it was awesome! (btw: thank you so much for reviewing a lot of my poems...it means so much. i'll be sure to do the same for you)
40singingspeechlessoh! i so love this. i especially like the last stanza and the rythm. you were consistent the whole way through and it was awesome! (btw: thank you so much for reviewing a lot of my poems...it means so much. i'll be sure to do the same for you)
7/17/2004 c1 8Amara Ryden
i think that everyone's been betrayed at some point or another... nice job.
p.s.
thanks for the review. =)
8Amara Rydeni think that everyone's been betrayed at some point or another... nice job.
p.s.
thanks for the review. =)
7/15/2004 c1 Muffin
Cool!
Cool!
7/15/2004 c1 9Rubbertusks
Wow.
I hope they don't deserve this poem. If they do they are evil. Therefore we must set up a little we hate Nik and Zen club on FP.
9RubbertusksWow.
I hope they don't deserve this poem. If they do they are evil. Therefore we must set up a little we hate Nik and Zen club on FP.
7/15/2004 c1 79Summerdazed
this issue is more ordinary, cuz you get hundreds of these a day, so it's not my favourite, but the last two lines are really good though!
keep writing, you'll go places form the way i see it!
=summerdazed=
79Summerdazedthis issue is more ordinary, cuz you get hundreds of these a day, so it's not my favourite, but the last two lines are really good though!
keep writing, you'll go places form the way i see it!
=summerdazed=
7/14/2004 c1 8forgottenmoon831
I'm guessing you're going through this in real life. Have you tried talking to Niki and Zen and telling them your feelings about what they're doing? If they don't listen and keep on, then they're not your friends, leave them behind.
There's always someone or some other people out there who's wiling to be your true friend. You just gotta search for them.
I personally believe that no one can ever really be friendless. And the way I picture your personality through your poems, I think YOU can never be friendless. :) Like in this poem, at the end, you said that no matter how much rumors they spread about you, you would never tell they're secrets. That's really commendable! It's rare to find people with that much dignity. So don't feel depressed cuz it's they're bad not yours. I'm sure in time, their rumors will get so old and so exaggerated that people won't believe them anymore.
Anyways, I'm starting to sound like a guidance counselor here, so I'll stop. It's just that you seemed to be so down lately. Anyways, you're still writing some awesome poems, keep on! ^_^
8forgottenmoon831I'm guessing you're going through this in real life. Have you tried talking to Niki and Zen and telling them your feelings about what they're doing? If they don't listen and keep on, then they're not your friends, leave them behind.
There's always someone or some other people out there who's wiling to be your true friend. You just gotta search for them.
I personally believe that no one can ever really be friendless. And the way I picture your personality through your poems, I think YOU can never be friendless. :) Like in this poem, at the end, you said that no matter how much rumors they spread about you, you would never tell they're secrets. That's really commendable! It's rare to find people with that much dignity. So don't feel depressed cuz it's they're bad not yours. I'm sure in time, their rumors will get so old and so exaggerated that people won't believe them anymore.
Anyways, I'm starting to sound like a guidance counselor here, so I'll stop. It's just that you seemed to be so down lately. Anyways, you're still writing some awesome poems, keep on! ^_^