for The Allure of Virginity1/1/2006 c1 
136Elliptical Shapes
Very weird.
The lad in the story is obviously a freak. Who wouldn't have banged that girl straight away when she invited you over, and who the hell would be interested in her 9 year old sister!
Seems like a bad paedophile to me, and the dude hasn't even tried out a real woman!
Well written though.
Alan.
136Elliptical ShapesVery weird.
The lad in the story is obviously a freak. Who wouldn't have banged that girl straight away when she invited you over, and who the hell would be interested in her 9 year old sister!
Seems like a bad paedophile to me, and the dude hasn't even tried out a real woman!
Well written though.
Alan.
12/30/2005 c19 tiff
interesting...i was just wondering if maybe you are gonna like continue on; write a sequel, with an older lily and keith...thought that may defeat the purpose of the story to begin with...it would still be interesting to see what happens in the future...maybe with a more mature lily...just wondering...-tiff*
interesting...i was just wondering if maybe you are gonna like continue on; write a sequel, with an older lily and keith...thought that may defeat the purpose of the story to begin with...it would still be interesting to see what happens in the future...maybe with a more mature lily...just wondering...-tiff*
12/30/2005 c19 4zzxasd43and
this was horrible. the first ten chapters or so were mostly half decent, but then out of nowhere emerges this big fairy land of perverts and pedophiles. i stuck through and read the whole thing though. whatever.
the ending was very sudden and didn't dive deep enough into the many side stories you created.
4zzxasd43andthis was horrible. the first ten chapters or so were mostly half decent, but then out of nowhere emerges this big fairy land of perverts and pedophiles. i stuck through and read the whole thing though. whatever.
the ending was very sudden and didn't dive deep enough into the many side stories you created.
12/28/2005 c19 19my dangerous angel baby
Thank jesus that everything worked out alright in the end. It's a cute relationship that he has with Lily and this is a wonderful story! Great job!
19my dangerous angel babyThank jesus that everything worked out alright in the end. It's a cute relationship that he has with Lily and this is a wonderful story! Great job!
12/27/2005 c4 oh so cliche
PEDOFILE? [if I even spelled that right...]
Really. I swear. Its a good story, good writing, but it makes him seem insane.
Again,
PEDOFILE.
PEDOFILE? [if I even spelled that right...]
Really. I swear. Its a good story, good writing, but it makes him seem insane.
Again,
PEDOFILE.
12/26/2005 c16 unsigned
very strange.
i found 'allure of virginity' on the favorite's list of an excellent writer. your premise disturbed me a bit, but curiousity eventually won out.
i'm still unsure about the merit of writing/reading this. it's only all too easy to be perceived as a pervert, authoring this piece of fiction. but i believe the turmulous backstory you've provided for characters like eddie and keith promise something more than smut.
i suppose only the conclusion will be telling.
will be keeping an eye on this.
very strange.
i found 'allure of virginity' on the favorite's list of an excellent writer. your premise disturbed me a bit, but curiousity eventually won out.
i'm still unsure about the merit of writing/reading this. it's only all too easy to be perceived as a pervert, authoring this piece of fiction. but i believe the turmulous backstory you've provided for characters like eddie and keith promise something more than smut.
i suppose only the conclusion will be telling.
will be keeping an eye on this.
12/26/2005 c16 19my dangerous angel baby
This is like the best story ever! It has so many embrassing scenes, lots of suspense, and very good characters. I want to know what happens to Lily! Can Keith save her in time and will his father ever know that he isn't some kind of pervert? Great story and please update soon!~
19my dangerous angel babyThis is like the best story ever! It has so many embrassing scenes, lots of suspense, and very good characters. I want to know what happens to Lily! Can Keith save her in time and will his father ever know that he isn't some kind of pervert? Great story and please update soon!~
12/11/2005 c14 41FreezingFire
This is a really weird story. Keith seems pretty disturbed, stealing Lily's underwear and creeping into her and Eddie's rooms. Eddie... nine years old and hooked on porn? Pathetic. Mark is just horrible, with his sick "business". I don't know... it's pretty brutal but you can't seem to stop reading.
41FreezingFireThis is a really weird story. Keith seems pretty disturbed, stealing Lily's underwear and creeping into her and Eddie's rooms. Eddie... nine years old and hooked on porn? Pathetic. Mark is just horrible, with his sick "business". I don't know... it's pretty brutal but you can't seem to stop reading.
12/9/2005 c1 Dude
You worry me. I hope this isn't based on your own experience. Otherwise, it's... very imaginative? But you still worry me.
You worry me. I hope this isn't based on your own experience. Otherwise, it's... very imaginative? But you still worry me.
12/4/2005 c13 Not So Serious
Please Update.This is one of the best stories here! ^_^
Please Update.This is one of the best stories here! ^_^