for Memories7/17/2004 c1 
11Mystical notes
good imagry, I think that your poems would be presented better if you put them in standard form, like with stanza's and breaking of those big lines into smaller lines, it may even effect the flow, just by placing it on the page better, I Think that it would create a better effects...just My thougts, no need to accept
and, shouldn't in the last line sees, be SEE, its just a typo I tought I'd point out.
Beautiful story, touching.
tata
11Mystical notesgood imagry, I think that your poems would be presented better if you put them in standard form, like with stanza's and breaking of those big lines into smaller lines, it may even effect the flow, just by placing it on the page better, I Think that it would create a better effects...just My thougts, no need to accept
and, shouldn't in the last line sees, be SEE, its just a typo I tought I'd point out.
Beautiful story, touching.
tata