for Empty Grave6/20/2005 c1 Lost in A World of Pain
A very moving poem. Your writing has improves bounds since last we spoke. A very well written poem. Rhyming that would make your old english teacher proud. A poem that is very close to the heart and probably touches emotions that many prefer not to think about. A good piece of literary work.
CheersLost in A World of Pain
A very moving poem. Your writing has improves bounds since last we spoke. A very well written poem. Rhyming that would make your old english teacher proud. A poem that is very close to the heart and probably touches emotions that many prefer not to think about. A good piece of literary work.
CheersLost in A World of Pain
3/30/2005 c1 
2via-paperclips
this is amazing! The patterns and the rythmn of the poem are beautiful, sad but nonetheless enchanting. You mezmorise the reader with the constant swaying of the words. "Alive yet dead- Yet again death defied"
2via-paperclipsthis is amazing! The patterns and the rythmn of the poem are beautiful, sad but nonetheless enchanting. You mezmorise the reader with the constant swaying of the words. "Alive yet dead- Yet again death defied"
8/25/2004 c1 40H. Moth
love the rhyming scheme in this, and how it all takes on a much darker tone towards the end...
40H. Mothlove the rhyming scheme in this, and how it all takes on a much darker tone towards the end...
8/21/2004 c1 22Just-try'en-to-speak
cool poem your right that does kinda go out to everyone thats really neat -Amo Ville
22Just-try'en-to-speakcool poem your right that does kinda go out to everyone thats really neat -Amo Ville
7/24/2004 c1 59Spootasia Tomoe
gosh golly gee...! *sighs* oh my, you have once again showed us the proper way to compose a rhyming poem. i bow to you. *bows*
i won't try to analyze it, but i just want to say that your poem rocked and i especially enjoyed your choice of words; especailly 'estate' and all of its meanings, like liabilities/assets of someone whom is dead (or bankrupt...) or someone's overall situation, etc... i see what you mean about the various meanings/stories the poem could have/tell. very well done! ^^
59Spootasia Tomoegosh golly gee...! *sighs* oh my, you have once again showed us the proper way to compose a rhyming poem. i bow to you. *bows*
i won't try to analyze it, but i just want to say that your poem rocked and i especially enjoyed your choice of words; especailly 'estate' and all of its meanings, like liabilities/assets of someone whom is dead (or bankrupt...) or someone's overall situation, etc... i see what you mean about the various meanings/stories the poem could have/tell. very well done! ^^