for The Four12/11/2004 c2 
14biminator
ending didn't make any sense. other than that, it was okay. kind of boring, but I'm sure there will be conflict somewhere.
14biminatorending didn't make any sense. other than that, it was okay. kind of boring, but I'm sure there will be conflict somewhere.
10/23/2004 c2 Decimaster321
"Fire and Brimstone"
That's awesome! Very very unlikely story, but I'd love to see how you get 4 teenagers to take down Nazi-earth! So far the story is good, even if not much has really happened yet. The play-form works, and the narration works well in making the characters believable. I don't really have much to say that past reviewers have said.
Good job.
"Fire and Brimstone"
That's awesome! Very very unlikely story, but I'd love to see how you get 4 teenagers to take down Nazi-earth! So far the story is good, even if not much has really happened yet. The play-form works, and the narration works well in making the characters believable. I don't really have much to say that past reviewers have said.
Good job.
10/6/2004 c2 fragmented blue
Geesh, my computer finally let me review you. It kept messing up before now. I suppose it's your intention to make this story as a play, and I personally find that really interesting. Your actions are well described-you have a way for hitting the little minute details that make each action seem real to the reader-and your dialogue is pretty refreshing. The part about how Nikolai dyed his hair was a little confusing; was it because he had to hide the fact that he was a Jew? Because to my understanding, the Jews had dark-colored hair, which set them apart from the Germans. I suppose then that Nikolai was trying to hide his real identity: is that right? I'm also trying to figure out the meaning of those three words that the four children, and then Nikolai keep saying: Fire and brimstone. Maybe I'll look up brimstone and then see what they're talking about. I'm looking towards the later chapters where the four children's plans against the Nazis come until light. Until next time,
Yanagi-chan
Geesh, my computer finally let me review you. It kept messing up before now. I suppose it's your intention to make this story as a play, and I personally find that really interesting. Your actions are well described-you have a way for hitting the little minute details that make each action seem real to the reader-and your dialogue is pretty refreshing. The part about how Nikolai dyed his hair was a little confusing; was it because he had to hide the fact that he was a Jew? Because to my understanding, the Jews had dark-colored hair, which set them apart from the Germans. I suppose then that Nikolai was trying to hide his real identity: is that right? I'm also trying to figure out the meaning of those three words that the four children, and then Nikolai keep saying: Fire and brimstone. Maybe I'll look up brimstone and then see what they're talking about. I'm looking towards the later chapters where the four children's plans against the Nazis come until light. Until next time,
Yanagi-chan
10/3/2004 c2 22Shadows Light
Interesting and creepy concept. It reads almost like a play, was that what you were going for? I like it so far, you should continue with this.
22Shadows LightInteresting and creepy concept. It reads almost like a play, was that what you were going for? I like it so far, you should continue with this.
8/13/2004 c1 14biminator
i thought i reviewed this, but I guess not. anyway, an odd concept, but well-thought. update soon.
14biminatori thought i reviewed this, but I guess not. anyway, an odd concept, but well-thought. update soon.
7/25/2004 c1 suzieque2
This is really good.
You know there are actually some people out there who believe the holocaust never happened? I lived in a german/american city years ago and in 9th grade we studied the holocaust. We were shown educational films complete with grewsome and heartwrenching scenes of what was left behind when the US soldiers arrived at one of the concentration camps. A fellow classmate got up in class and started shouting that it was all a lie, his father told him that the holocaust never happened and he believed his father.
I don't think I'd be writing this now if it didn't happen. My mother's father was an American Soldier who was stationed in West Germany after WWII, he met a German woman named Irma, they fell in love and had a baby, my mother.
This is really good.
You know there are actually some people out there who believe the holocaust never happened? I lived in a german/american city years ago and in 9th grade we studied the holocaust. We were shown educational films complete with grewsome and heartwrenching scenes of what was left behind when the US soldiers arrived at one of the concentration camps. A fellow classmate got up in class and started shouting that it was all a lie, his father told him that the holocaust never happened and he believed his father.
I don't think I'd be writing this now if it didn't happen. My mother's father was an American Soldier who was stationed in West Germany after WWII, he met a German woman named Irma, they fell in love and had a baby, my mother.
7/24/2004 c1 3The Naked Emperor
hhmm...intersting...i wanna see what happens next...update diddy mow!
3The Naked Emperorhhmm...intersting...i wanna see what happens next...update diddy mow!