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7/14/2009 c1 Hebe
Hey!

Just a bit of concrit~

This was a little hard to understand with all the names in! I get lost from it so easily, there's like 14 characters suddenly being introduced!

It would help if you paced them out a bit, or cut down on them just a titch~~
7/26/2004 c1 6The great disappointment
This is good-very cool. Please update it soon! Yeah yeah, this is a lame review, I know but it was all I could think of to say.

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