for Chronos EO: Omni Prospect V110/22/2004 c4 Xerro
Sorry it took me so long to review, i had blown my pc up, but it's working again now so i'm back.
Once again the fight scenes are enthralling to read, it's very decriptive and pretty precise in what happens. I'm still now completely clear on the story, but i was pretty much mindboggled by the length of it. It took a while to read. I mean that chapter was what 20 words at least? Anyway good chapter i hope you update soon. I'm sure a lot more people will come to read your story, when they realise just how well you've written it.
Laterz
Sorry it took me so long to review, i had blown my pc up, but it's working again now so i'm back.
Once again the fight scenes are enthralling to read, it's very decriptive and pretty precise in what happens. I'm still now completely clear on the story, but i was pretty much mindboggled by the length of it. It took a while to read. I mean that chapter was what 20 words at least? Anyway good chapter i hope you update soon. I'm sure a lot more people will come to read your story, when they realise just how well you've written it.
Laterz
9/6/2004 c3 Xerro
Sorry it took so long to review your story. I've been busy, but i'm here now. I've got a few things to say. One it is awesome. The way you describe characters, objects and fights is really good, you integrate it all well together. I can also say the way your writing it in a cinematography way is good. It's a style i haven't seen before and it's good, don't lose it. The story itself sounds interesting, yes there are one or two things that seem unclear at the moment, but i know that'll clear up as the story goes on. I'm looking forward to the next chapter so please do update soon.
Sorry it took so long to review your story. I've been busy, but i'm here now. I've got a few things to say. One it is awesome. The way you describe characters, objects and fights is really good, you integrate it all well together. I can also say the way your writing it in a cinematography way is good. It's a style i haven't seen before and it's good, don't lose it. The story itself sounds interesting, yes there are one or two things that seem unclear at the moment, but i know that'll clear up as the story goes on. I'm looking forward to the next chapter so please do update soon.
8/25/2004 c3 
1Terryll Preston
A very interesting and engrossing style of writing - done from a cinematic angle and perspective? Definitely an original style (at least, I haven't seen it tried on this site before)! The flow of your story was pretty good and the characterization was spot on. Overall, I would say for you to continue. If you don't, I'll sic Chibi on you! Hah-hah! But seriously, please continue on to the next chapter! If a story is good enough for me to ask for a next chapter, then you know you should keep going.
See you next review!
1Terryll PrestonA very interesting and engrossing style of writing - done from a cinematic angle and perspective? Definitely an original style (at least, I haven't seen it tried on this site before)! The flow of your story was pretty good and the characterization was spot on. Overall, I would say for you to continue. If you don't, I'll sic Chibi on you! Hah-hah! But seriously, please continue on to the next chapter! If a story is good enough for me to ask for a next chapter, then you know you should keep going.
See you next review!
8/16/2004 c2 1HeavenDemon
Wow. I really like it so far. It's a little bit confusing, but not to the point that you can't figure out what's going on. Nice work.
1HeavenDemonWow. I really like it so far. It's a little bit confusing, but not to the point that you can't figure out what's going on. Nice work.
8/14/2004 c2 Ephemeral Seraphim
Another nice chapter. I hope to see more. Anyway, I'd like to know if you want to join this writing group that I've been setting up. All you have to do is e-mail me with your approval. Hasta luego.
chibichocobo
Another nice chapter. I hope to see more. Anyway, I'd like to know if you want to join this writing group that I've been setting up. All you have to do is e-mail me with your approval. Hasta luego.
chibichocobo
8/4/2004 c1 Ephemeral Seraphim
I like your description and writing style. Can't wait to see how this turns out. Keep up the good work. Hasta luego.
chibichocobo
I like your description and writing style. Can't wait to see how this turns out. Keep up the good work. Hasta luego.
chibichocobo
7/29/2004 c1 10Curtis White
Promising story. Sounds like a manga that already exists. I can't remember the name at the moment.
Don't worry about that. Your story isn't too much alike. Keep it up!
10Curtis WhitePromising story. Sounds like a manga that already exists. I can't remember the name at the moment.
Don't worry about that. Your story isn't too much alike. Keep it up!