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7/30/2004 c1 14DigiDayDreamer
Hello, Nodjmet. I just wandered into your story and I'm surprised to find some good stuff. Not that many authors have written stories as good as this one. The prologue is excellent: concise, free of grammar mistakes and good handling of writing in one point of view. The only gripe I have is the sudden switch in POVs (point of view), changing from third-person to first-person. It may have been better if you kept both scenes consistent in terms of POV, like starting from he girl's point of view in the first scene. Otherwise, everything is well.
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Looking forward to the next chapter!
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Spell ya later!

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