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7/30/2004 c1 14DigiDayDreamer
Hello, Nodjmet. I just wandered into your story and I'm surprised to find some good stuff. Not that many authors have written stories as good as this one. The prologue is excellent: concise, free of grammar mistakes and good handling of writing in one point of view. The only gripe I have is the sudden switch in POVs (point of view), changing from third-person to first-person. It may have been better if you kept both scenes consistent in terms of POV, like starting from he girl's point of view in the first scene. Otherwise, everything is well.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Spell ya later!

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