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8/3/2004 c1 123GothicSpook
That's really cool! Short and sweet! I think it's great!
8/3/2004 c1 191nine iron
It is very monotempoic, I would suggest breaking it into breaths to make it a smoother read. It has a nice idea inside it but I would also provide structure and depth to the order.
Keep writing and good luck
Nine Iron

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