for From Unknown to Loved
8/3/2004 c1 123GothicSpook
That's really cool! Short and sweet! I think it's great!
8/3/2004 c1 191nine iron
It is very monotempoic, I would suggest breaking it into breaths to make it a smoother read. It has a nice idea inside it but I would also provide structure and depth to the order.
Keep writing and good luck