for Something Happened3/24/2005 c1 Sugabunny
Hm. This strikes me as a good beginning for a haiku story. The ending leaves a lot to the imagination and pulls the reader in, so good work !
Hm. This strikes me as a good beginning for a haiku story. The ending leaves a lot to the imagination and pulls the reader in, so good work !
10/20/2004 c1 
2philoslove
It really conjures up an image os someone simply understanding and being there for a troubled loved one. The method of not revealing the event is simply delicious and suspenseful! Short, sweet and leaves an impact on the reader. Awesome.
2philosloveIt really conjures up an image os someone simply understanding and being there for a troubled loved one. The method of not revealing the event is simply delicious and suspenseful! Short, sweet and leaves an impact on the reader. Awesome.
8/25/2004 c1 David Stephen
Very good Haiku. I love the mystery of the 'thing' that has happened. It could be good if you make a sort of serial? With each chapter having one haiku on it - which replay the past? Overall - a brilliant Haiku. Well done! ~David~
Very good Haiku. I love the mystery of the 'thing' that has happened. It could be good if you make a sort of serial? With each chapter having one haiku on it - which replay the past? Overall - a brilliant Haiku. Well done! ~David~
8/13/2004 c1 10Meleny
I read this one a while ago... I guess I never reviewed... anyways its short but sweet and sends a strong but short message. Like a good haiku should=D
-Lost
10MelenyI read this one a while ago... I guess I never reviewed... anyways its short but sweet and sends a strong but short message. Like a good haiku should=D
-Lost
8/10/2004 c1 Stephen Fierce Publications
Good job. I like it. Now, about your review, I know that I shouldn't sound like a critic, it's just that I have written a lot of haikus and have developed a sense as to which ones sound right to me. However, if you thought that your haiku sounded right, then that's fine, it doesn't matter what I think.
Good job. I like it. Now, about your review, I know that I shouldn't sound like a critic, it's just that I have written a lot of haikus and have developed a sense as to which ones sound right to me. However, if you thought that your haiku sounded right, then that's fine, it doesn't matter what I think.
8/9/2004 c1 5Thepolia
*whoa* I like how it is not so explicit and leaves room for the imagination... nice haiku.
5Thepolia*whoa* I like how it is not so explicit and leaves room for the imagination... nice haiku.
8/5/2004 c1 22MorbidMan
Nice job. I like it. I got a new story posted if you want to check it out. I like this.
22MorbidManNice job. I like it. I got a new story posted if you want to check it out. I like this.
8/5/2004 c1 57teh tarik
I love the mysterious yet tragic feel of this piece. The way you intentionally left it hanging was even more tragic.
57teh tarikI love the mysterious yet tragic feel of this piece. The way you intentionally left it hanging was even more tragic.
8/4/2004 c1 14Derrick Edgar James
I like how you left the "something" entirely up to the reader. It gives the whole piece more meaning and allows it to appeal to a larger audience (everyone is allowed their own "something"). Great job.
14Derrick Edgar JamesI like how you left the "something" entirely up to the reader. It gives the whole piece more meaning and allows it to appeal to a larger audience (everyone is allowed their own "something"). Great job.