for Brilliance of the Moon4/3/2007 c1 ErosAndSunsets
Wow I absolutely LOVE this three line form you got going on. and your comparisons and metaphores are amazing. Where I live light pollution dominates, preventing any stars from being visible, so I'm especially drawn to this piece. I also like the words you used to describe; they're extrememly effective and I feel like I am lying on the grass, looking up at the moon and stars. sweet!
Wow I absolutely LOVE this three line form you got going on. and your comparisons and metaphores are amazing. Where I live light pollution dominates, preventing any stars from being visible, so I'm especially drawn to this piece. I also like the words you used to describe; they're extrememly effective and I feel like I am lying on the grass, looking up at the moon and stars. sweet!
9/28/2005 c1 
3Pont
Thankies for reviewing! ^_^
I'd be happy to do an exchange with you if you want- You give me 14 words and I give you 14 words, and we could both do bouts rimés poems until the sun goes down! :D
but if you just keep writing poems like this I'll keep gawking. Very beautiful, I love your variety of adjectives. The stanzas seem to me a little bit choppy in their shortness, and I think you could flow from subject to subject a little better. I think I like your newer poems better ;) but this is still a work of art! Brava!
~ponteh
3PontThankies for reviewing! ^_^
I'd be happy to do an exchange with you if you want- You give me 14 words and I give you 14 words, and we could both do bouts rimés poems until the sun goes down! :D
but if you just keep writing poems like this I'll keep gawking. Very beautiful, I love your variety of adjectives. The stanzas seem to me a little bit choppy in their shortness, and I think you could flow from subject to subject a little better. I think I like your newer poems better ;) but this is still a work of art! Brava!
~ponteh
10/11/2004 c1 123Raya Dronaile
wonderful poem, very pretty. I loved. "Oinpricks in the velvet" I liked that line a lot. great job!
123Raya Dronailewonderful poem, very pretty. I loved. "Oinpricks in the velvet" I liked that line a lot. great job!
8/21/2004 c1 11zublefir
That was really good. I espeacially like the last stanza. It captures the spirit of the poem.
11zublefirThat was really good. I espeacially like the last stanza. It captures the spirit of the poem.
8/16/2004 c1 Aiis
Beautiful poem..
Your title reminded me of a certain book with the same title, Brilliance of the Moon from the Tales of the Otori.. the last book in the series..
But that's besides the point.
Wonderful choice of words and imagery; well-written.
Beautiful poem..
Your title reminded me of a certain book with the same title, Brilliance of the Moon from the Tales of the Otori.. the last book in the series..
But that's besides the point.
Wonderful choice of words and imagery; well-written.
8/12/2004 c1 8forgottenmoon831
How was your rhyming scheme? It was awesome! This has such a peaceful tone to it, I love it! Beautiful poem, as always, great job!
8forgottenmoon831How was your rhyming scheme? It was awesome! This has such a peaceful tone to it, I love it! Beautiful poem, as always, great job!
8/11/2004 c1 Ericalyn
I really like that! I don't know how to describe it, but it was absolutely amazing! Great Job!
I really like that! I don't know how to describe it, but it was absolutely amazing! Great Job!