for Rise From The Shadows8/20/2006 c1 YuLian
This is a really creepy story! At least so far. The one problem about your story is that you keep switching tenses and that makes it very confusing. Plus, with your big gaps in the paragraphs, it feels very choppy. Other than that, I like the story!
-YuLian aka EmpatheticAngel
This is a really creepy story! At least so far. The one problem about your story is that you keep switching tenses and that makes it very confusing. Plus, with your big gaps in the paragraphs, it feels very choppy. Other than that, I like the story!
-YuLian aka EmpatheticAngel
9/5/2004 c1 
5Elpheen
hey,i guess i owe u a review,so here it is!this is interesting...please continue!wots weird is that ur writing style kinda echoes wot mine used 2 b lyk...its lyk reading sumthing by me lol!
5Elpheenhey,i guess i owe u a review,so here it is!this is interesting...please continue!wots weird is that ur writing style kinda echoes wot mine used 2 b lyk...its lyk reading sumthing by me lol!
8/11/2004 c1 17Danica Loy
Eep! OK! you have my attention keep writing I want to know what happens! Who's the mystery stranger? Will her dream come true? I've got a few creative ideas... hehehum just continue!
17Danica LoyEep! OK! you have my attention keep writing I want to know what happens! Who's the mystery stranger? Will her dream come true? I've got a few creative ideas... hehehum just continue!
8/11/2004 c1 11Wolfie Star26
ur stories are always awesome. i love this. i cant wait to find out who the figure is, though we do know that it is a man. update soon.
11Wolfie Star26ur stories are always awesome. i love this. i cant wait to find out who the figure is, though we do know that it is a man. update soon.