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8/13/2004 c1 E.G. Reamolty
I found this piece intriguing, but it does need some more context. Without context, it's emotionally flat because we have no reason to care about the woman. However, I still found that it packed some punch so keep writing!
8/13/2004 c1 2Billthegeek
Good narration - I'm impressed - but seems meaningless. Give the readers some clue about where she (the main character) is, why she is there, who is the man who killed her and why.

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