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9/13/2004 c1 6549875654987
That is so disturbing, but in a good way. I like how the story begins and ends with the same line, it gives one the feeling that Tangent will kill again. (and I love that name, it describes his personality very well)
8/22/2004 c1 10Zarancids
Fucking raunchy. I enjoyed it, but you have some writing mechanics to fix.
8/13/2004 c1 5Teelget
Oh dear. Found myself clutching my eye as I read through the last few paragraphs.
You describe things very well, and have original ideas. But I think you could bring some emotions in. What does Tangent feel when he kills the boy? I know he's the sort of killer who murders in a second, thinking about it most of the time, I know what goes through his head, but I lack the emotions. But maybe this is just me.
8/13/2004 c1 1mitch mcrae
spontaneous homicide..
if you ask me, i would say the name explains it all right there..
its a great story, a little on the gory side, but, that just adds.. flavour...
keep it up ben, i would like to see how you writing in about 2 years.. because, so far, you are improving the more you write.. your latest is deffedently an improvment.

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