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3/29/2006 c1 Bronwen Ackeley
I'm going to say that drunk driver stories are overdone, but I'm also going to say that I liiked this one, more then a lot of others I've read. You pulled it off with grace and talent, with some emotion added in the mix.

Really loved it. It's reasons like this why we hate the world.

~Bronwen, the Dark Angel~
12/28/2004 c1 13Kitty-Kat4life
omg thats good! how come yu never read that to me! ...very good :)!
8/25/2004 c1 10sensativelement14
wow...
wow...
WOW...
very interesting
and very poetic
very gruesome...
oh well. i like!
8/16/2004 c1 612simpleplan13
Peddling his little feet as fast as they could go.. pedaling
The boy was still a while from school when a police drove right by.. policewoman or the police
Wow.. that ending is so sad and powerful.. tahts an amazing poem.. some of the rhyme seems forced though... but still taht deep shit
8/15/2004 c1 64freeyourself
omg thats soo sad, i hate drivers like that! r! great poem. oh yah, fictionpress is working on my computer now, finally!
8/14/2004 c1 147hiding behind amber eyes
aww! r u trying to make me cry? lol thats a awesome poem, it flows wonderfully! i hope it isnt true.
8/14/2004 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
Wow, I really love the story that you tell here, its very emotional and complex. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more soon. Keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
8/14/2004 c1 14Nikki-tippi
Aw! That's so sad, but it's very good! Good point. Great how it ryhmes the whole way through.

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