for A Hint of Color9/13/2004 c1 
20Once in a blue moon
Interesting. I can't really find the rythm 'cause I'm at school and can't read it aloud, but I'm sure when I'm home I'll find it. ^_^
I like the thought of a story in a poem. It's been done before, but this is somehow different, I think, because the poetry is almost prose in itself.
Have you ever heard of Mary Abbots (I could be completly wrong with the name, which really helps you a lot!)? Well, that's who you remind me of in this poem... if that's her name of course... :)
20Once in a blue moonInteresting. I can't really find the rythm 'cause I'm at school and can't read it aloud, but I'm sure when I'm home I'll find it. ^_^
I like the thought of a story in a poem. It's been done before, but this is somehow different, I think, because the poetry is almost prose in itself.
Have you ever heard of Mary Abbots (I could be completly wrong with the name, which really helps you a lot!)? Well, that's who you remind me of in this poem... if that's her name of course... :)
8/22/2004 c1 12Terra Tigra
This reminds me of a short story I once read, but it wasn't in poem form... and it was a rewrite of Snow White. Actually, they have nothing in common... I don't know why I thought of that.
Nice poem. But are you trying to focas more on the poem itself or the story? Because, if you want to emphasize the story, you might want to focas on a main character or something. The story sounds very interesting so far but there isn't a whole lot to grasp or connect with.
As a poem, I think its very good. I'm glad you used freeverse for this, it probably would have been dificult to rhyme. You don't want it to sound forced.
Nice job ;)
Arrivederci!
-Terra-
12Terra TigraThis reminds me of a short story I once read, but it wasn't in poem form... and it was a rewrite of Snow White. Actually, they have nothing in common... I don't know why I thought of that.
Nice poem. But are you trying to focas more on the poem itself or the story? Because, if you want to emphasize the story, you might want to focas on a main character or something. The story sounds very interesting so far but there isn't a whole lot to grasp or connect with.
As a poem, I think its very good. I'm glad you used freeverse for this, it probably would have been dificult to rhyme. You don't want it to sound forced.
Nice job ;)
Arrivederci!
-Terra-
8/21/2004 c1 Incrys
Whoo, got a shudder there. Post more and let me know! (By the way, are you planning on doing more on the poem "Roses"? I really liked that piece =)
Whoo, got a shudder there. Post more and let me know! (By the way, are you planning on doing more on the poem "Roses"? I really liked that piece =)
8/19/2004 c1 6Chyriyu
Awesome. I like how it is poetry and a story at the same time. It has good detail, too. Thanks for the reviews for mine. ^_^ I also have a parakeet, Jinni. 'Tis such a joy to be around birds. Lol, I guess that is why I write so many poems about birds.
6ChyriyuAwesome. I like how it is poetry and a story at the same time. It has good detail, too. Thanks for the reviews for mine. ^_^ I also have a parakeet, Jinni. 'Tis such a joy to be around birds. Lol, I guess that is why I write so many poems about birds.
8/19/2004 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
Great detail and imagry, I love it, keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietGreat detail and imagry, I love it, keep up the good work.
Much love,
Juliet.