for Death Kiss9/24/2004 c1 
22The Broken Hearted
laura that was realli good. u should write more poems. luv u lots
shannon
22The Broken Heartedlaura that was realli good. u should write more poems. luv u lots
shannon
8/19/2004 c1 5eyesrdiolies
Wow, I really liked this and it was inspired by one of my favorite mangas as well. Very good and keep on writing :)
5eyesrdioliesWow, I really liked this and it was inspired by one of my favorite mangas as well. Very good and keep on writing :)
8/19/2004 c1 234The Moribund Marionette
Great. You can write poetry, too, so don't seclude all of your talent within your stories.
Sentence I would fix: "I really wish to kill you, rather then my other wish."
Sentence I loved the most: "You tear down my defense and build up my disease."
Great job.
R/R some of my stuff if you wish. :)
~Writer of Darkness~
234The Moribund MarionetteGreat. You can write poetry, too, so don't seclude all of your talent within your stories.
Sentence I would fix: "I really wish to kill you, rather then my other wish."
Sentence I loved the most: "You tear down my defense and build up my disease."
Great job.
R/R some of my stuff if you wish. :)
~Writer of Darkness~