for Alone7/28/2009 c1 
5CuriousContradiction
The repetition set up a good flow, and I could definitely feel all that yearning and aching. It's one of the saddest feelings in the world when you're down and hopeless about that someone.
I think the last line should be
"Is for you to be alone like me"
Maybe you could use punctuation. Ex. apostrophe for I'll instead of Ill, which means sick.
I hope that didn't come out harsh. I'm glad I read this today because I posted a chapter about feeling lonely a few days ago, and then I saw this and could completely relate. You definitely put the feelings into words.
5CuriousContradictionThe repetition set up a good flow, and I could definitely feel all that yearning and aching. It's one of the saddest feelings in the world when you're down and hopeless about that someone.
I think the last line should be
"Is for you to be alone like me"
Maybe you could use punctuation. Ex. apostrophe for I'll instead of Ill, which means sick.
I hope that didn't come out harsh. I'm glad I read this today because I posted a chapter about feeling lonely a few days ago, and then I saw this and could completely relate. You definitely put the feelings into words.
8/20/2004 c1 5Itsinthacan16
Sarah, this is very good! But I want you to know that you aren't alone. I know you meant boyfriend wise but I'll always be here for you to talk when you need! Love ya girl! Later ~Maggie
5Itsinthacan16Sarah, this is very good! But I want you to know that you aren't alone. I know you meant boyfriend wise but I'll always be here for you to talk when you need! Love ya girl! Later ~Maggie