for The Thirteenth8/15 c1 Emma Robertson
I LOVE IT. I rate it a 5000 out of 10 It was so. .. just. ... . "LOVE"
I LOVE IT. I rate it a 5000 out of 10 It was so. .. just. ... . "LOVE"
7/7/2018 c1 Guest
That was a really cute story, good job. LOVED IT!
That was a really cute story, good job. LOVED IT!
8/13/2015 c1 annayh44
Now, I think Friday 13 is luckiest day haha. .woowww it was really good storyyyyyy. .
Now, I think Friday 13 is luckiest day haha. .woowww it was really good storyyyyyy. .
4/11/2015 c1 authorised1960
Hmm, I'm struggling to find the 'romance'; in this story as it appears to be more about rampant hormones that the sensual seduction one might normally associate from a true romance story. It reads somewhere between a sexual fantasy and borderline soft porn... For me, too much dialogue and not enough descriptive passages left me feeling as though I was overhearing an anecdotal conversation between two girl friends. The 'chatty' tone just didn't work for me. On the plus side, you do have a talent for telling a story, but it needs refining and polishing. On the whole 7/10
Hmm, I'm struggling to find the 'romance'; in this story as it appears to be more about rampant hormones that the sensual seduction one might normally associate from a true romance story. It reads somewhere between a sexual fantasy and borderline soft porn... For me, too much dialogue and not enough descriptive passages left me feeling as though I was overhearing an anecdotal conversation between two girl friends. The 'chatty' tone just didn't work for me. On the plus side, you do have a talent for telling a story, but it needs refining and polishing. On the whole 7/10
11/3/2014 c1 mishxx
amazing plz write more!:):):)
amazing plz write more!:):):)
8/17/2014 c1 Jess
Daniel is soo awesome! really cute story :-)
Daniel is soo awesome! really cute story :-)
5/8/2014 c1 XO Ione
Once I've read a scene I found utterly cute, I can't help but read it all over again ;) This is so beautifully written, and I completely love the characters — I love this story, especially the couple, Daniel Jay Aleron and Samantha Kylee Tyler. PERFECT 3
Once I've read a scene I found utterly cute, I can't help but read it all over again ;) This is so beautifully written, and I completely love the characters — I love this story, especially the couple, Daniel Jay Aleron and Samantha Kylee Tyler. PERFECT 3
5/21/2013 c1 Guest
Great
Great
2/20/2013 c1 Cool
Wow, I loved this! Very well written! :D
Wow, I loved this! Very well written! :D
12/23/2012 c1 Tina3
I think that this one shot is well written and very detailed with the actions the charaters take. I think you should just put more detail of what the people are wearing and their eye colour etc as its a bit vague however well written and make more one shots! I enjoyed it ;) hope this gives you the help you were looking for. If not I'm sorry ahahaha xD xxx
I think that this one shot is well written and very detailed with the actions the charaters take. I think you should just put more detail of what the people are wearing and their eye colour etc as its a bit vague however well written and make more one shots! I enjoyed it ;) hope this gives you the help you were looking for. If not I'm sorry ahahaha xD xxx
6/25/2012 c1 glowphone
Barry Hall Kravatz like if you switch the b and the h it's Harry (Hairy) Ball Kravataz (Crevasse, a.k.a. a crack)! That must be intentional! Am I the only one who got that?
What an awesome story too! Love it!
Barry Hall Kravatz like if you switch the b and the h it's Harry (Hairy) Ball Kravataz (Crevasse, a.k.a. a crack)! That must be intentional! Am I the only one who got that?
What an awesome story too! Love it!
4/8/2012 c1 An
Haha aw so cute and perfect :) Loved it!
Haha aw so cute and perfect :) Loved it!
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