for The Airhead Files9/29/2004 c5 brownie
I was just kidding. keep updating.. Cleverness once again, writing from two points of view, are you a guy? kidding... maybe writing from experience? well good chapter actually chapters... I read in bulk. But yea grammar error before you started the story (your comment) maybe u should learn spalding, i learnt it in this hole of a skool Tangara!
Have moved though...
UPDATE SOON...
I was just kidding. keep updating.. Cleverness once again, writing from two points of view, are you a guy? kidding... maybe writing from experience? well good chapter actually chapters... I read in bulk. But yea grammar error before you started the story (your comment) maybe u should learn spalding, i learnt it in this hole of a skool Tangara!
Have moved though...
UPDATE SOON...
9/29/2004 c1 brownie
hey that was really cool! I rkn your little friend claudie_audie is weird. It seems she reads ur story a little too often, but doesn't review! That's a little lame... anyway back to d story, u hav really clever little lines that made me crack up, but it would be more helpful if it was more descriptive about d characters for i hav no imagination...
UPDATE SOON... (not)
hey that was really cool! I rkn your little friend claudie_audie is weird. It seems she reads ur story a little too often, but doesn't review! That's a little lame... anyway back to d story, u hav really clever little lines that made me crack up, but it would be more helpful if it was more descriptive about d characters for i hav no imagination...
UPDATE SOON... (not)
9/29/2004 c5 
28child's play
I found this really good relaxing reading, especially since my exams are coming and I really needed some good diversion. =)
I like the way you portrayed Sydney. Did I mention that I'm ever so grateful that you didn't make her a Mary Sue or some pseudo-goth/punk or some stereotyical person. I like the way her character's turning out and I'll be sure to check back for updates.
28child's playI found this really good relaxing reading, especially since my exams are coming and I really needed some good diversion. =)
I like the way you portrayed Sydney. Did I mention that I'm ever so grateful that you didn't make her a Mary Sue or some pseudo-goth/punk or some stereotyical person. I like the way her character's turning out and I'll be sure to check back for updates.
9/27/2004 c5 1rock 'n' roll junkie
Hehe, Sydney's cool, lol. I like this story! It's so cliched, lol, yet it holds truth in a way. My high school isn't this bad, I feel sorry for everyone who have to deal with other brainless people...haha meaning Sydney, Catherine, etc. Keep up the great work!
1rock 'n' roll junkieHehe, Sydney's cool, lol. I like this story! It's so cliched, lol, yet it holds truth in a way. My high school isn't this bad, I feel sorry for everyone who have to deal with other brainless people...haha meaning Sydney, Catherine, etc. Keep up the great work!
9/27/2004 c1 bec yes its me again
mia who is bumblebee?
mia who is bumblebee?
9/27/2004 c5 bec
yep. i'm getting lazy i cant think of a better name.
mia that was a very very lazy chapter!
it showed badly. take it off and change/edit etc...
there r lots of gaps in story, description adn detail. such as shouldn't sydney go to physics when catherine goes to history NOT art... and whats wid the sudden background stuff. the POV is getting iritating yet again.
btw exactly what part of me r u using to create Jackie? cos i am not a lap dog...
thankyou.
P.S: claudi nice 1... if i think i know what u did! hehe
yep. i'm getting lazy i cant think of a better name.
mia that was a very very lazy chapter!
it showed badly. take it off and change/edit etc...
there r lots of gaps in story, description adn detail. such as shouldn't sydney go to physics when catherine goes to history NOT art... and whats wid the sudden background stuff. the POV is getting iritating yet again.
btw exactly what part of me r u using to create Jackie? cos i am not a lap dog...
thankyou.
P.S: claudi nice 1... if i think i know what u did! hehe
9/27/2004 c5 bec
yep. i'm getting lazy i cant think of a better name.
mia that was a very very lazy chapter!
it showed badly. take it off and change/edit etc...
there r lots of gaps in story, description adn detail. such as shouldn't sydney go to physics when catherine goes to history NOT art... and whats wid the sudden background stuff. the POV is getting iritating yet again.
btw exactly what part of me r u using to create Jackie? cos i am not a lap dog...
thankyou.
P.S: claudi nice 1... if i think i know what u did! hehe
yep. i'm getting lazy i cant think of a better name.
mia that was a very very lazy chapter!
it showed badly. take it off and change/edit etc...
there r lots of gaps in story, description adn detail. such as shouldn't sydney go to physics when catherine goes to history NOT art... and whats wid the sudden background stuff. the POV is getting iritating yet again.
btw exactly what part of me r u using to create Jackie? cos i am not a lap dog...
thankyou.
P.S: claudi nice 1... if i think i know what u did! hehe
9/27/2004 c5 NoFlyingPigsHere
loved this chapter. i also like the "press the button stuff" keep updating!
loved this chapter. i also like the "press the button stuff" keep updating!
9/27/2004 c4 julie
ok well its ok good story
but pls make the paras shorter i skipped all the aras with more than 4 lines so yeh do that n it will be heaps better
ok well its ok good story
but pls make the paras shorter i skipped all the aras with more than 4 lines so yeh do that n it will be heaps better
9/26/2004 c4 Vincent
Its ok but honestly, you had a few spelling errors.
I think you should be more decriptive of the images of each character particularly the main ones. For example Sydney and Nick. What are their nationalitites? How do they sound like? Because this Sydney girl sounds similar to the 'airhead' girls (because of her side comments). And why is Sydney's friend her best friend if Sydney is so violent and rough and lied to her? I honestly cannot relate to that. I would personally go for Catherine because she seems more down to earth. How does this character sound, look and act like? I dont like parties either and i like a good book so it would be good if you talked about Catherine more and less of this Sydney character. You said these characters dont represent anyone so these are just my personal opinions that you can (or not) take into consideration as a writer. Whoever you are.
Its ok but honestly, you had a few spelling errors.
I think you should be more decriptive of the images of each character particularly the main ones. For example Sydney and Nick. What are their nationalitites? How do they sound like? Because this Sydney girl sounds similar to the 'airhead' girls (because of her side comments). And why is Sydney's friend her best friend if Sydney is so violent and rough and lied to her? I honestly cannot relate to that. I would personally go for Catherine because she seems more down to earth. How does this character sound, look and act like? I dont like parties either and i like a good book so it would be good if you talked about Catherine more and less of this Sydney character. You said these characters dont represent anyone so these are just my personal opinions that you can (or not) take into consideration as a writer. Whoever you are.
9/23/2004 c4 becmyster
well i havn't read the chapters yet but i will. soon. yeah im a lazy ass. and im too damn tired to criticise. i read the reviews tho and i think u know enough about me to know what im thinking... mia have u guessed yet. if not... well ull just hav 2 ask me l8r. anyway just dun let it get to ur head... that shouldn't happen cos i'll always be there to bring u bak down. hehe.
becOSAMA...
ps: jude law is SO HOT and he's mine!
well i havn't read the chapters yet but i will. soon. yeah im a lazy ass. and im too damn tired to criticise. i read the reviews tho and i think u know enough about me to know what im thinking... mia have u guessed yet. if not... well ull just hav 2 ask me l8r. anyway just dun let it get to ur head... that shouldn't happen cos i'll always be there to bring u bak down. hehe.
becOSAMA...
ps: jude law is SO HOT and he's mine!
9/23/2004 c4 miniqiduz
Yes...mia. Pretty good. Im actually suprised you got so many reviews.Hi5! ok that just sounds gay. Any ways...have you noticed that ive been extremly nice in all my reviews? Well all i can say(criticism) is when am i gonna be introduced into the story.Hey? Well.i love the character "Nick" hehehe.
Yes...mia. Pretty good. Im actually suprised you got so many reviews.Hi5! ok that just sounds gay. Any ways...have you noticed that ive been extremly nice in all my reviews? Well all i can say(criticism) is when am i gonna be introduced into the story.Hey? Well.i love the character "Nick" hehehe.
9/22/2004 c4 2eve-maiden
awesome chappie! I dont think it needs to be reviewed. it's great! Update soon!
2eve-maidenawesome chappie! I dont think it needs to be reviewed. it's great! Update soon!