for The New Chosen Five:The Begining of New Darkness1/4/2005 c1 kat
Umm some constructive criticism - maybe think about re-writing this and working out some of the kinks and such? I know its fantasy but maybe you could make the dialogue a little more realistic. I think you should find some way to hook your readers a bit and maybe expand your vocabulary in writing this? Sorry if you're offended - I'm an English teacher (really can't help it! ^_^)Kat
Umm some constructive criticism - maybe think about re-writing this and working out some of the kinks and such? I know its fantasy but maybe you could make the dialogue a little more realistic. I think you should find some way to hook your readers a bit and maybe expand your vocabulary in writing this? Sorry if you're offended - I'm an English teacher (really can't help it! ^_^)Kat
11/23/2004 c1 Kaze Holimion
Even with this story you have your updating problem...jeez. You have been slacking lately. Well have no fear for Kaze is here to get you back on track. Well once again another start to a future masterpiece. Update soon. Catch you on the flip side.
Even with this story you have your updating problem...jeez. You have been slacking lately. Well have no fear for Kaze is here to get you back on track. Well once again another start to a future masterpiece. Update soon. Catch you on the flip side.
9/28/2004 c1 
11Cloud Burst
hmm,, intriguing beginning, sounding interesting, maybe u couldve done a little prophecy poem, heh, lol anyways dun stop there!
11Cloud Bursthmm,, intriguing beginning, sounding interesting, maybe u couldve done a little prophecy poem, heh, lol anyways dun stop there!