for What the Future Holds8/26/2006 c38 Roo
o-o Don't kill me, I'm reviewing! O_O I'm innocent, I tell you! INNOCENT!*ahem* Now then... Short little chapter. XD Mostly just to put things together, yeah. And of course it did a good job explaining the 'emo dragon' that we all know and love. Or at least, those who have heard you tell the story know and love... Pfft, the rest of them will learn to love him, too.A few grammar mistakes, but none that I can find again at this very moment in time. It's vaguely annoying having heard the story twice, because I can't be all shocked and curious about Deneth's destruction. Agh.As always, it was a good chapter.
o-o Don't kill me, I'm reviewing! O_O I'm innocent, I tell you! INNOCENT!*ahem* Now then... Short little chapter. XD Mostly just to put things together, yeah. And of course it did a good job explaining the 'emo dragon' that we all know and love. Or at least, those who have heard you tell the story know and love... Pfft, the rest of them will learn to love him, too.A few grammar mistakes, but none that I can find again at this very moment in time. It's vaguely annoying having heard the story twice, because I can't be all shocked and curious about Deneth's destruction. Agh.As always, it was a good chapter.
8/26/2006 c38 Dorin
Yay! This chapter wasn't pointless, it was needed to explain things! lol, we never really did find a way to explain the whole Deneth thing logically.
keep writing!
Yay! This chapter wasn't pointless, it was needed to explain things! lol, we never really did find a way to explain the whole Deneth thing logically.
keep writing!
8/26/2006 c38 
3Una Rundstrom
Another great chapter! Im glad Deneth is back...but the depression saucks! Though Melion is there to comfort him! yay...please please pleeasse hurry up with the next chapter...Ill spork you if ye dont!
:p XD
Love yasBeth
3Una RundstromAnother great chapter! Im glad Deneth is back...but the depression saucks! Though Melion is there to comfort him! yay...please please pleeasse hurry up with the next chapter...Ill spork you if ye dont!
:p XD
Love yasBeth
8/26/2006 c38 GalevinFierre
Well...that chapter seemed much shorter than usual...maybe it's just me.
I still find it hard to beleive that he could stay a dragon for two milleniums while his brother still thought he was dead...I mean...that's just cruel thought, no matter how you say it. So Deneth is going to be like an 'emo' character in this story? There's always gotta be one, huh? _ Oh well...I guess for certain scenes his persona will be good. Waitin' for the next chapter!
Well...that chapter seemed much shorter than usual...maybe it's just me.
I still find it hard to beleive that he could stay a dragon for two milleniums while his brother still thought he was dead...I mean...that's just cruel thought, no matter how you say it. So Deneth is going to be like an 'emo' character in this story? There's always gotta be one, huh? _ Oh well...I guess for certain scenes his persona will be good. Waitin' for the next chapter!
8/14/2006 c37 Delusional-Weirdo1
_ gah! i haven't read such a good story in so long! (haven't been online that much though ;P) but i really like it! it's like... good! heh, heh, damn, i'm getting hyper! this is really good and um awesome and i'm repeating myself alot. sorry, normally don't get so worked up but jeez, really good! this is a roleplay you made, right? i've been wanting to start one but noone's cooperating... T.T EITHER WAY! update soon please!^o^ *yay! yay!*
_ gah! i haven't read such a good story in so long! (haven't been online that much though ;P) but i really like it! it's like... good! heh, heh, damn, i'm getting hyper! this is really good and um awesome and i'm repeating myself alot. sorry, normally don't get so worked up but jeez, really good! this is a roleplay you made, right? i've been wanting to start one but noone's cooperating... T.T EITHER WAY! update soon please!^o^ *yay! yay!*
8/13/2006 c37 Alex
The cliffhanger is great and so is the twist with the entertainers being anarchists. Can't wait for the next chapter!
The cliffhanger is great and so is the twist with the entertainers being anarchists. Can't wait for the next chapter!
8/13/2006 c37 Dorin
lol, interesting. I expect links to ALL of the pictures over e-mail! I liked this chapter, but it had a lot of stuff going on.
'bout time my little Denny-poo came back! *chuckles evilly*
keep up the good work.
lol, interesting. I expect links to ALL of the pictures over e-mail! I liked this chapter, but it had a lot of stuff going on.
'bout time my little Denny-poo came back! *chuckles evilly*
keep up the good work.
8/12/2006 c37 Roo
Yay for Deneth! I would be all quizzical about the dragon and the troupe and Deneth and everything, but I already know what happens. ^^; So I will ask the obvious questions that I would ask if I had no clue what was going on: Isn't Deneth dead? And what's with the dragon? Is he some sort of cursed Elf, Demon or human? The suspense, the horror, the romance, the tragedy! Now in theatres! Not really, but it will be someday. Hopefully. o-oAaw for the cute moment between Ryo and Kei. ^^ They're so adorable. And dysfunctional. XD
Yay for Deneth! I would be all quizzical about the dragon and the troupe and Deneth and everything, but I already know what happens. ^^; So I will ask the obvious questions that I would ask if I had no clue what was going on: Isn't Deneth dead? And what's with the dragon? Is he some sort of cursed Elf, Demon or human? The suspense, the horror, the romance, the tragedy! Now in theatres! Not really, but it will be someday. Hopefully. o-oAaw for the cute moment between Ryo and Kei. ^^ They're so adorable. And dysfunctional. XD
8/12/2006 c37 10KatyaChekov
I KNEW his brother had to survive! I remember way back about 36, 37 chapters ago, I thought that his brother might survive. And Ryo is free, free, free! He doesn't have to be king anymore! (whirls around in circles with Ryo until we're both dizzy)
@_@ Blah... I saw some mistakes with spelling ('at' instead of 'and', near the beginning, and confusion between 'its' and 'it's'), but it's a really good chapter! ^_^ And Kei's back! (it's Kei's turn to get grabbed and whirled around)
Kei & Ryo: @_@ So...dizzy... (crash into each other)
Me: ^_- Who! More! Write more!
10KatyaChekovI KNEW his brother had to survive! I remember way back about 36, 37 chapters ago, I thought that his brother might survive. And Ryo is free, free, free! He doesn't have to be king anymore! (whirls around in circles with Ryo until we're both dizzy)
@_@ Blah... I saw some mistakes with spelling ('at' instead of 'and', near the beginning, and confusion between 'its' and 'it's'), but it's a really good chapter! ^_^ And Kei's back! (it's Kei's turn to get grabbed and whirled around)
Kei & Ryo: @_@ So...dizzy... (crash into each other)
Me: ^_- Who! More! Write more!
8/12/2006 c37 Beth
I loved the little scene with Ryo and Kei! I think she would look sweet as an ice demon...and the cliffie! *Gaspeth* I do remember from your telling that he did come back...I also remember my fav part...and I want that to come soon...*sigh* the good ole days in the tent...making you tell this amazing story. ^_^ can't wait for more loves
-Beth
I loved the little scene with Ryo and Kei! I think she would look sweet as an ice demon...and the cliffie! *Gaspeth* I do remember from your telling that he did come back...I also remember my fav part...and I want that to come soon...*sigh* the good ole days in the tent...making you tell this amazing story. ^_^ can't wait for more loves
-Beth
8/12/2006 c37 GalevinFierre
Dum, dum, DUM! Dramatic Reverb!
Yeah...about that ending...yeeaah...
Well, with all that talk of elements I thought I was reading a game FAQ for a bit, but it was a good chapter. Foreshadowing some romace in WTFH I see? Maybe not. Ryo fought with his nails, *Laugh* Scratch them to death. I thought the spell that Eclipse cast was a bit undescriptive...I mean it just said 'Chants' and 'Moves hands' but whatever, that's just me. Still...Ryo should just have kicked and punched...heh...he scracthed them to death.
Ryo's brother...is a zombie or something or other...or maybe Eclipse did the same for him and kept it a secret or something?
Yes...it must be so. Well, until the next chapter.
Dum, dum, DUM! Dramatic Reverb!
Yeah...about that ending...yeeaah...
Well, with all that talk of elements I thought I was reading a game FAQ for a bit, but it was a good chapter. Foreshadowing some romace in WTFH I see? Maybe not. Ryo fought with his nails, *Laugh* Scratch them to death. I thought the spell that Eclipse cast was a bit undescriptive...I mean it just said 'Chants' and 'Moves hands' but whatever, that's just me. Still...Ryo should just have kicked and punched...heh...he scracthed them to death.
Ryo's brother...is a zombie or something or other...or maybe Eclipse did the same for him and kept it a secret or something?
Yes...it must be so. Well, until the next chapter.
8/10/2006 c2 Batz
Second chapter is well written and keeps the reader interested.
Second chapter is well written and keeps the reader interested.
8/7/2006 c1 Schuyler
Great Din! Better than what you told at camp. Only without facial expressions and Sware words. Oh well I'll do without. Can't wait to read more!
Great Din! Better than what you told at camp. Only without facial expressions and Sware words. Oh well I'll do without. Can't wait to read more!
8/6/2006 c1 Leila
This chapter is well written and able to keep the reader's attention; which is perfect for an opening chapter. However I did find a few (very few) grammer mistakes. All in all 8.9 out of 10.
This chapter is well written and able to keep the reader's attention; which is perfect for an opening chapter. However I did find a few (very few) grammer mistakes. All in all 8.9 out of 10.
8/2/2006 c36 Alex
It was a good chapter, but like you said a bit pointless.
It was a good chapter, but like you said a bit pointless.