for Bloodstar Manor: Unwanted Guardian9/17/2016 c1 Shiina
So it's going to be one of those stories where the guy who was raped and his rapist end up together, huh. I'm am so SICK of this. Not only it's almost impossible to find a slash story without rape in it, but it's almost as often that the two people involved start a 'normal' relationship like it was no big deal.
It seems rape is only used as a lazy way to create drama or 'bind' characters together.
So it's going to be one of those stories where the guy who was raped and his rapist end up together, huh. I'm am so SICK of this. Not only it's almost impossible to find a slash story without rape in it, but it's almost as often that the two people involved start a 'normal' relationship like it was no big deal.
It seems rape is only used as a lazy way to create drama or 'bind' characters together.
7/23/2013 c38 Carolinel3
Omg! Ed! FMA! You watch! . that made my day!
Havent yet read this chapter cuase im so happy you quoted ed!
Omg! Ed! FMA! You watch! . that made my day!
Havent yet read this chapter cuase im so happy you quoted ed!
12/3/2011 c4 AcrylicHeart
Its Dark Prophet, back like I said I would be. :) This chapter is very... Well, it isn't a filler, because a lot does happen, but at the same time it's like nothing happens. Hmm. How to put that... I guess I put it the only way I can lol. I like it, duh, and as 'little' as does happen it sort of shoves the story forward.
Also, when Jason is creating the lullaby, you say he strikes a note lower 'then' the others rather than 'than.' That's the only error I could find in this one. And I apologize if there's anything nonsensical in this because I'm on my Droid and it autocorrects like the devil. Lol. Count on more reviews soon! Til then :)
DP
Its Dark Prophet, back like I said I would be. :) This chapter is very... Well, it isn't a filler, because a lot does happen, but at the same time it's like nothing happens. Hmm. How to put that... I guess I put it the only way I can lol. I like it, duh, and as 'little' as does happen it sort of shoves the story forward.
Also, when Jason is creating the lullaby, you say he strikes a note lower 'then' the others rather than 'than.' That's the only error I could find in this one. And I apologize if there's anything nonsensical in this because I'm on my Droid and it autocorrects like the devil. Lol. Count on more reviews soon! Til then :)
DP
12/2/2011 c3 Dark Prophet
Oh. My. God. The cheese factor! Nosier than a herd of elephants eating a bag of peanuts? Lol. That made my day whilst reading it. And I can really, REALLY see how some of the writing was more... Juvenile, maybe, than more recent things I've read. I understand that you were young so count me impressed either way, but man have you grown. :) Apparently I missed this story much more than I thought I did. And I have to say, reading the last bits with Avril Lavigne in the background got really depressing. But it was good mood music lol.
So, when Jason jumps from the window, how far up is he? I can't imagine that trying to straighten his legs into the impact is too intelligent of him (Not that I would accuse him of geniusness). It's probably a good thing for his poor knees that he falls when he lands or he may end up with a compacted ankle. I'm sure you've done the research on that though lol. I'm just curious to be entirely honest. If I jumped out my window it would hurt because I'm so close to the ground. But in my old house I would have shattered my ankles from hitting the concrete under my room o.o;
I can picture Atremis waving that fork full of meat around like a madwoman while yelling at Kali and Yue. It's prefect. Not to mention that I do it too.
All this Jason-Rori-Idon'-pleaseletmebeandthink-pleasedon'trapeme going on is depressing. :P I guess I'm a glutton for punishment.
Now then, I am on to chapter 3. :)
Oh. My. God. The cheese factor! Nosier than a herd of elephants eating a bag of peanuts? Lol. That made my day whilst reading it. And I can really, REALLY see how some of the writing was more... Juvenile, maybe, than more recent things I've read. I understand that you were young so count me impressed either way, but man have you grown. :) Apparently I missed this story much more than I thought I did. And I have to say, reading the last bits with Avril Lavigne in the background got really depressing. But it was good mood music lol.
So, when Jason jumps from the window, how far up is he? I can't imagine that trying to straighten his legs into the impact is too intelligent of him (Not that I would accuse him of geniusness). It's probably a good thing for his poor knees that he falls when he lands or he may end up with a compacted ankle. I'm sure you've done the research on that though lol. I'm just curious to be entirely honest. If I jumped out my window it would hurt because I'm so close to the ground. But in my old house I would have shattered my ankles from hitting the concrete under my room o.o;
I can picture Atremis waving that fork full of meat around like a madwoman while yelling at Kali and Yue. It's prefect. Not to mention that I do it too.
All this Jason-Rori-Idon'-pleaseletmebeandthink-pleasedon'trapeme going on is depressing. :P I guess I'm a glutton for punishment.
Now then, I am on to chapter 3. :)
12/1/2011 c1 Dark Prophet
You know, reading this again after so many years, I can see just how much you've improved. I am utterly impressed with how far this story has come, and I really enjoy going back and forth between the original (revamped for error or not) and the Redux. :) I don't know what else I can say lmao other than I have never been quite so taken with an author or a story as I have been with this story and you, as an author, in all 19 years of my life. Even Dean Koontz, still my favourite, hasn't gotten me this good yet. So keep that head up woman. Life will work out for you in the end, and I'm sure deep down somewhere you know it will. And even if it doesn't at first, you've got people to hold you up, you've got me to listen to you rant if needed, and you have Jason to bash around to relieve some of the stress. ^^
Much love!
DP
You know, reading this again after so many years, I can see just how much you've improved. I am utterly impressed with how far this story has come, and I really enjoy going back and forth between the original (revamped for error or not) and the Redux. :) I don't know what else I can say lmao other than I have never been quite so taken with an author or a story as I have been with this story and you, as an author, in all 19 years of my life. Even Dean Koontz, still my favourite, hasn't gotten me this good yet. So keep that head up woman. Life will work out for you in the end, and I'm sure deep down somewhere you know it will. And even if it doesn't at first, you've got people to hold you up, you've got me to listen to you rant if needed, and you have Jason to bash around to relieve some of the stress. ^^
Much love!
DP
7/7/2011 c48 
5Rei Inaki
I think this is for the best. You've grown a lot from the start of this thing. I should know, I was there at the beginning. And I love how Redux has been going. It feels so much more organic than this beast. It's nice to see how you're writing style as developed and I for one love the changes. I think it is time to let this draft rest. Besides its got to be death trying to juggle Redux and UG when your style has shifted. Anyways, dot worry about little ol' me. I'm still here. Keep writing and I hope to see more from you soon!
P.S. I WAS curious about Guilty Pleasures, I wont lie.
5Rei InakiI think this is for the best. You've grown a lot from the start of this thing. I should know, I was there at the beginning. And I love how Redux has been going. It feels so much more organic than this beast. It's nice to see how you're writing style as developed and I for one love the changes. I think it is time to let this draft rest. Besides its got to be death trying to juggle Redux and UG when your style has shifted. Anyways, dot worry about little ol' me. I'm still here. Keep writing and I hope to see more from you soon!
P.S. I WAS curious about Guilty Pleasures, I wont lie.
7/6/2011 c48 resalith
I always loved Julian :( I remember I commented ages ago about it.
Anyways I am looking forward to reading redux.
I always loved Julian :( I remember I commented ages ago about it.
Anyways I am looking forward to reading redux.
12/20/2010 c47 RollingGirl
I finally got off my lazy ass and finished reading this! 8D (I'm the short Asian girl from DA) YOU MUST WRITE MORE, WOMAN! ...is it a bad thing that I want to slap Gabriel with a fish?
I finally got off my lazy ass and finished reading this! 8D (I'm the short Asian girl from DA) YOU MUST WRITE MORE, WOMAN! ...is it a bad thing that I want to slap Gabriel with a fish?
9/1/2010 c47 Rei Inaki
Happy Birthday Snyffles!
Man that was one hell of a chapter. I'm still trying to process all that just happened. Always glad to know I made your day better. When I find a writer on here that I like, I stick with them no matter what. So remember that whenever you run into a rough spot, I've got your back. The spotty updates haven't driven me off yet and aren't going to anytime soon. Keep up the good work, I'll be standing by for the next one.
~Rei
Happy Birthday Snyffles!
Man that was one hell of a chapter. I'm still trying to process all that just happened. Always glad to know I made your day better. When I find a writer on here that I like, I stick with them no matter what. So remember that whenever you run into a rough spot, I've got your back. The spotty updates haven't driven me off yet and aren't going to anytime soon. Keep up the good work, I'll be standing by for the next one.
~Rei
8/24/2010 c46 rae2009
NO you can't stop there! you've gotta continue! that's the awesomest frigging story i've ever read, you've gotta update soon! okay? okay!
NO you can't stop there! you've gotta continue! that's the awesomest frigging story i've ever read, you've gotta update soon! okay? okay!
8/8/2010 c5 Soraya Zeeva
I just have to stop reading and say that I really like this story. I wasn't too sure about it at first, but by the third chapter I was coming around and now I'm hook. I think the thing I like the best about this is the emotions in the story. I can feel them in the words.
I just have to stop reading and say that I really like this story. I wasn't too sure about it at first, but by the third chapter I was coming around and now I'm hook. I think the thing I like the best about this is the emotions in the story. I can feel them in the words.
8/2/2010 c46 2completeandtotalrandomness
I shall now answer your question that you ask at the end of very single chapter: I FRIKKIN LOVE THIS SO MUCH THAT IT WILL SPONTANEOUSLY COMBUST WITH THE PASSION OF THE CHARACTERS~! lulz I'm luving the relationship with Jason/Rori/Julian, although my fave is Artemis who reminds me of one of the characters I'm creating lulz ^^ keep it up~
~a fujoshi, and damn proud of it
2completeandtotalrandomnessI shall now answer your question that you ask at the end of very single chapter: I FRIKKIN LOVE THIS SO MUCH THAT IT WILL SPONTANEOUSLY COMBUST WITH THE PASSION OF THE CHARACTERS~! lulz I'm luving the relationship with Jason/Rori/Julian, although my fave is Artemis who reminds me of one of the characters I'm creating lulz ^^ keep it up~
~a fujoshi, and damn proud of it
8/1/2010 c38 completeandtotalrandomness
omg! I am a total FMA fan ^^ Go Team Edward Elric! Luv the story and smex too, along with the massive amount of updates~ ^^
omg! I am a total FMA fan ^^ Go Team Edward Elric! Luv the story and smex too, along with the massive amount of updates~ ^^
7/24/2010 c46 Amiri
I love this! Please continue posting chapters. I've been glued to my laptop all day because of you. :D
I love this! Please continue posting chapters. I've been glued to my laptop all day because of you. :D
6/22/2010 c3 Mini-Kyo
One thing as to your revival of this account: WOO!
One thing as to your revival of this account: WOO!