for Puzzle of June the Fifth1/15/2005 c2 candycorn22
i definately think this could be expanded on, but for now it works. do you plan on adding to this chapter? anyway, nice work an' all, just keep it up!
i definately think this could be expanded on, but for now it works. do you plan on adding to this chapter? anyway, nice work an' all, just keep it up!
1/15/2005 c1 candycorn22
short, but good so far. was the use of 'my' in the first line intentional? 'cause if it is, who are you?
short, but good so far. was the use of 'my' in the first line intentional? 'cause if it is, who are you?
1/10/2005 c2 
2Bloodflower
Consider this a review for a review.
This is very good, I love your clipped style.
It's just your very first line has a first person 'my' in it, I don't know whether that's intentional - but the rest of it is in third person, so I'm kind of wondering about that. Other than that, thumbs up! Can't wait for more!
2BloodflowerConsider this a review for a review.
This is very good, I love your clipped style.
It's just your very first line has a first person 'my' in it, I don't know whether that's intentional - but the rest of it is in third person, so I'm kind of wondering about that. Other than that, thumbs up! Can't wait for more!
1/5/2005 c2 3freakiidrooop
it's short but certainly got me hooked. keep writing! (not so good at writing reviews)
3freakiidrooopit's short but certainly got me hooked. keep writing! (not so good at writing reviews)
1/5/2005 c1 54orangepen23
very short. Interesting, but short. It would be interesting to know if your 'homocide report' follows the actually format of a real report.
54orangepen23very short. Interesting, but short. It would be interesting to know if your 'homocide report' follows the actually format of a real report.
1/5/2005 c2 Ahemait
haha i 'm in your profile! thank you friend! nice story...update or i shall murder you in your sleep! bwahahaha!
haha i 'm in your profile! thank you friend! nice story...update or i shall murder you in your sleep! bwahahaha!
11/20/2004 c1 Alex
c'est tres bien, mon ami!
c'est tres bien, mon ami!
9/27/2004 c2 5EvilNeko13
I like the way this is written. Very short and simple sentences describing the case, yet paragraphs without any choppiness or interruptions. Good work!
^.^
EvilNeko13
P.S. I thought a good title might be "June the Fifth, 2004" or maybe drop the 2004. I don't know. Just a suggestion. lol.
5EvilNeko13I like the way this is written. Very short and simple sentences describing the case, yet paragraphs without any choppiness or interruptions. Good work!
^.^
EvilNeko13
P.S. I thought a good title might be "June the Fifth, 2004" or maybe drop the 2004. I don't know. Just a suggestion. lol.
9/27/2004 c2 6Crystal Clear Lies
Wow, this is good! I can't wait until the next chapter! Hmm...How about...'Pieces and Puzzles'? Sounds corny, yes. But I thought it would fit...You don't have to
6Crystal Clear LiesWow, this is good! I can't wait until the next chapter! Hmm...How about...'Pieces and Puzzles'? Sounds corny, yes. But I thought it would fit...You don't have to