for Dark10/10/2005 c1 
9Morbid Maxwell
Wonderful! Dark, ...wait, that's the title! XD Well, then it worked. Wonderful job...fantastic.
Morbid Maxwell-Oh, you're a kinky little bastard.
9Morbid MaxwellWonderful! Dark, ...wait, that's the title! XD Well, then it worked. Wonderful job...fantastic.
Morbid Maxwell-Oh, you're a kinky little bastard.
9/27/2005 c1 8Mr. Singh is back
Wholly shit, dude.
Totally sad, really weird, finally a good rhyme scheme, clever use of numbers as set up, thrusted an image in my head, damn near close to perfection.
8Mr. Singh is backWholly shit, dude.
Totally sad, really weird, finally a good rhyme scheme, clever use of numbers as set up, thrusted an image in my head, damn near close to perfection.
7/2/2005 c1 63lackluster
the ending line is amazing. i also like how you used the numbers almost as a backwards countdown(if that makes sense)great work!
~tuesday
63lacklusterthe ending line is amazing. i also like how you used the numbers almost as a backwards countdown(if that makes sense)great work!
~tuesday
11/20/2004 c1 23angel-of-woe
aw that was really good, and sad, i liked how it rhymed in time with the drops of blood, and ym fave bit is where on the last line, the cut makes vision go dark, well...its hard to explain.
23angel-of-woeaw that was really good, and sad, i liked how it rhymed in time with the drops of blood, and ym fave bit is where on the last line, the cut makes vision go dark, well...its hard to explain.
11/18/2004 c1 141AllyCred
all i can say is like *WOW*, that was just beautiful and i have to say i loved it. your a great writer and bring more emotion in one piece than most can in ten. it was just brilliant.
lots of love
AllyCred
141AllyCredall i can say is like *WOW*, that was just beautiful and i have to say i loved it. your a great writer and bring more emotion in one piece than most can in ten. it was just brilliant.
lots of love
AllyCred
11/14/2004 c1 20dont want to know
hey. i really enjoyed that. well maybe those aren't the right words to say considering; but i thought it was brilliantly written.
i would like to read some more of yours. how old are you?
20dont want to knowhey. i really enjoyed that. well maybe those aren't the right words to say considering; but i thought it was brilliantly written.
i would like to read some more of yours. how old are you?
10/12/2004 c1 1Syrins
Onions... that's an odd name... oh well. Sorry about RRD's review... v.v;; I'll have to talk to her... Because she's wrong, just because you're dieing for love doesn't make anyone sick. And I agree. Just because you write about cutting, doesn't mean you really do it. Anyways, I don't know anything about you, accept that you're the best author I've read and you're on my favs. Oh, and I really, REALLY loved this poem. The best yet. Post more!
1SyrinsOnions... that's an odd name... oh well. Sorry about RRD's review... v.v;; I'll have to talk to her... Because she's wrong, just because you're dieing for love doesn't make anyone sick. And I agree. Just because you write about cutting, doesn't mean you really do it. Anyways, I don't know anything about you, accept that you're the best author I've read and you're on my favs. Oh, and I really, REALLY loved this poem. The best yet. Post more!
10/10/2004 c1 14redroplets
I can't believe I'm doing this; but the last thing I need in my pathetic life is guilt for letting onion die believing that it is NECESSARY to kill himself. First off you obviously didn't understand the message in this poem that is by far an easy message to get... it even says in the first couple of lines... I CAN'T BELIEVE HE LEFT ME! HUGE HINT 'LOVE,' you are sadly mistaken if you thought it was 'necessary' to kill yourself. I write slash poems because I try to let people know the many reasons why people kill themselves love being #1 on the death chart... That doesn't mean that if you were dumped by someone to go ahead and kill yourself... please have more sense than that... anyways it's a good thing I posted this huh? wouldn't want you to go slashing wrists now would we... yeah i know my poems rock and i am brilliant thanks...anyways stay alive onion
14redropletsI can't believe I'm doing this; but the last thing I need in my pathetic life is guilt for letting onion die believing that it is NECESSARY to kill himself. First off you obviously didn't understand the message in this poem that is by far an easy message to get... it even says in the first couple of lines... I CAN'T BELIEVE HE LEFT ME! HUGE HINT 'LOVE,' you are sadly mistaken if you thought it was 'necessary' to kill yourself. I write slash poems because I try to let people know the many reasons why people kill themselves love being #1 on the death chart... That doesn't mean that if you were dumped by someone to go ahead and kill yourself... please have more sense than that... anyways it's a good thing I posted this huh? wouldn't want you to go slashing wrists now would we... yeah i know my poems rock and i am brilliant thanks...anyways stay alive onion
10/9/2004 c1 onions'nbunions
I think your poem totally rocks! Now I know it's necessary to kill myself. Keep writing! You're brilliant, mate!
I think your poem totally rocks! Now I know it's necessary to kill myself. Keep writing! You're brilliant, mate!
10/3/2004 c1 7Syns
If it's about dieing for love, then do you ever make me sick. Oh, the rude thing again. Whatever. Is there a way to say sorry without faulting your pride and still getting to say your honest truth? Doubt it, where would politics be if we had that? Otherwise, I liked this poem, the best I've read on fp.com so far, uh... well done. Does that get old after the sixth time? I still mean it, though...
7SynsIf it's about dieing for love, then do you ever make me sick. Oh, the rude thing again. Whatever. Is there a way to say sorry without faulting your pride and still getting to say your honest truth? Doubt it, where would politics be if we had that? Otherwise, I liked this poem, the best I've read on fp.com so far, uh... well done. Does that get old after the sixth time? I still mean it, though...
10/1/2004 c1 54orangepen23
sounds like this was written by (or maybe about) someone with a mental illness...
54orangepen23sounds like this was written by (or maybe about) someone with a mental illness...