for I Remember8/12/2005 c1 Adra
That's so beautiful. It has the feeling of innocents and truth. very well done.
That's so beautiful. It has the feeling of innocents and truth. very well done.
1/6/2005 c1 
2vanya moonshine
First, thanks for reviewing my "Tips To Annoy", second, that was beautiful. :) I loved it! Keep on writing. - V. Moonshine
2vanya moonshineFirst, thanks for reviewing my "Tips To Annoy", second, that was beautiful. :) I loved it! Keep on writing. - V. Moonshine
12/15/2004 c1 30Weeba
Oh, beautiful. The images are lovely and vivid, I can see and feel everything happening...I love the oranges in particular. I usually can't stand poetry that tries to describe food, but only because most of it is so terrible; I loved that stanza.
And the third stanza, too, was very moving. I was at a funeral once for a man I didn't know (he was about 50), and I cried. I couldn't really understand why. I could really identify with that image.
Grand words don't seem right for this poem; it's simple and sweet and just right. I usually show off my vocabulary with a nice "magnificent" or "fantastic"; but this isn't either of those things. It's bittersweet and heartbreaking and quietly reminiscent. Wonderful.
30WeebaOh, beautiful. The images are lovely and vivid, I can see and feel everything happening...I love the oranges in particular. I usually can't stand poetry that tries to describe food, but only because most of it is so terrible; I loved that stanza.
And the third stanza, too, was very moving. I was at a funeral once for a man I didn't know (he was about 50), and I cried. I couldn't really understand why. I could really identify with that image.
Grand words don't seem right for this poem; it's simple and sweet and just right. I usually show off my vocabulary with a nice "magnificent" or "fantastic"; but this isn't either of those things. It's bittersweet and heartbreaking and quietly reminiscent. Wonderful.
11/29/2004 c1 rain-angel03
this...is so good...and sad...but GOOD! love that last part.
this...is so good...and sad...but GOOD! love that last part.
11/22/2004 c1 16Pico the Great
Good. Realy good stuff, love the imagery here. The frist couple stanzas are great, andthe ending pulls them all together v. well.Love the last line.Kudos!-PTG
16Pico the GreatGood. Realy good stuff, love the imagery here. The frist couple stanzas are great, andthe ending pulls them all together v. well.Love the last line.Kudos!-PTG
11/14/2004 c1 23feelingloved
This is my favorite of your poems so far. I love how you've taken the weeping willows, and turned it around for the willows to be weeping for the boy. And I love the last two lines. They're very conclusive to the poem. Much better than in the Whitewashed Walls poem, if I do say. I'm not always one for puntcuation, but this is such a narrative poem, I think that it would benefit from periods and commas and whatnot. Just a suggestion though, of course. Good luck in your future pieces :)
23feelinglovedThis is my favorite of your poems so far. I love how you've taken the weeping willows, and turned it around for the willows to be weeping for the boy. And I love the last two lines. They're very conclusive to the poem. Much better than in the Whitewashed Walls poem, if I do say. I'm not always one for puntcuation, but this is such a narrative poem, I think that it would benefit from periods and commas and whatnot. Just a suggestion though, of course. Good luck in your future pieces :)
11/3/2004 c1 7Quill of sanguinity
Subtle and touching... The tone is smooth and sort of serene, and I like the gentle rhythmic beat
7Quill of sanguinitySubtle and touching... The tone is smooth and sort of serene, and I like the gentle rhythmic beat
10/29/2004 c1 4Candy-yum-yum
wow, this is really deep. acctually, i just attended my great-grandmothers funeral last wednesday. it was truley sad, but i'm glad i understood what was going on. i love memories, i've been remembering random ones lately, i like this poem.
4Candy-yum-yumwow, this is really deep. acctually, i just attended my great-grandmothers funeral last wednesday. it was truley sad, but i'm glad i understood what was going on. i love memories, i've been remembering random ones lately, i like this poem.
10/26/2004 c1 34moonarised polane
this is really gd. it captures all the childhood memories you hold dear to you and draws the reader in.
you maintained a gd sad tone throughout the whole poem. that was really well done.
your ending was really well done.
wonderful work here!
34moonarised polanethis is really gd. it captures all the childhood memories you hold dear to you and draws the reader in.
you maintained a gd sad tone throughout the whole poem. that was really well done.
your ending was really well done.
wonderful work here!
10/24/2004 c1 6purplemuffin
*crosses fingers* plez let me review plez let me review...
its so wow... and so sad and and and... *sobs* ur gunna make me cry! but i remember... *sniffle* *whimper* aw...
6purplemuffin*crosses fingers* plez let me review plez let me review...
its so wow... and so sad and and and... *sobs* ur gunna make me cry! but i remember... *sniffle* *whimper* aw...
10/17/2004 c1 1pianomaestra
Wow, very powerful. This may be your best poem yet, though the saddest. But still, I think it's great.
1pianomaestraWow, very powerful. This may be your best poem yet, though the saddest. But still, I think it's great.