for My Love9/19/2006 c1 
87Chaos Apple
Amazing...f*cking amazing! I adore this piece, and your writing style! The phrasing here was brilliant! You, my dear sir (um...) are going on my favorite list!
Alice
87Chaos AppleAmazing...f*cking amazing! I adore this piece, and your writing style! The phrasing here was brilliant! You, my dear sir (um...) are going on my favorite list!
Alice
7/11/2006 c1 56AsianScaper
And here we are ruminating over your writing talents. At last, poetry! :) After reading your essays, I was convinced that your writing improved and it has. Wonderful imagery on this one; it has a breathtaking unity. Your selection of words fits right in. I especially liked this part: "In me you hid your stars, golden and dying." Poignant! Kudos!
56AsianScaperAnd here we are ruminating over your writing talents. At last, poetry! :) After reading your essays, I was convinced that your writing improved and it has. Wonderful imagery on this one; it has a breathtaking unity. Your selection of words fits right in. I especially liked this part: "In me you hid your stars, golden and dying." Poignant! Kudos!
12/13/2004 c1 53Lidless Eye
PowerfulPowerfulPowerful
I liked it very very much.
Good writing touch. Good descriptions on love, too.
~Lidless Eye
53Lidless EyePowerfulPowerfulPowerful
I liked it very very much.
Good writing touch. Good descriptions on love, too.
~Lidless Eye
10/28/2004 c1 8glitterjewele
*chills to the most infinite chills*
o chica, this is gorgeous. i very much like your new style ~ despite the fact that my heart looks suspiciously like a celtic knot at the end of the piece and i feel like crying . . . *hmph*. some truly awesome imagery, especially at the beginning ~ "your lips, so soft and blue" was brilliant; euphemistic death. oh but my favorite part was: "take your last breath/away from me" ~ utter perfection, the way you divided that line so that we think it means one thing and then it's so much more. but ah, the four shorter lines at the end . . . ze shivers are infinite. t'was great how you started and ended it with 'my love' ~ quite a nice touch.
and now i must get back to hell-*cough* that is, essay writing. yeah. but i believe i shall be able to endure the pain now, as this poem has resurrected my brain! woot! ! *high five* you rock chica! :D
8glitterjewele*chills to the most infinite chills*
o chica, this is gorgeous. i very much like your new style ~ despite the fact that my heart looks suspiciously like a celtic knot at the end of the piece and i feel like crying . . . *hmph*. some truly awesome imagery, especially at the beginning ~ "your lips, so soft and blue" was brilliant; euphemistic death. oh but my favorite part was: "take your last breath/away from me" ~ utter perfection, the way you divided that line so that we think it means one thing and then it's so much more. but ah, the four shorter lines at the end . . . ze shivers are infinite. t'was great how you started and ended it with 'my love' ~ quite a nice touch.
and now i must get back to hell-*cough* that is, essay writing. yeah. but i believe i shall be able to endure the pain now, as this poem has resurrected my brain! woot! ! *high five* you rock chica! :D
10/23/2004 c1 acccountkiller
O.O *lets head drop to the side* I had a dream I stole a car last night. Yes...this is so shocking that's about all I can muster...WOWNESS CHICA! Talk about a new style! I love the incomplete verses, sentences that go on on the next verse, the contradictory colours, the blur, the passion, EVERYTHING! And you can't blame puberty as you're growing out of it...almost. This is PURELY GENIUS! Your genius babe! Bloody rocks and I ADMIRE YOU SO MUCH! You must write more, I adore the new style and this poem just...what was it? Ah, yes: rocks my shizna. Love, Mia
O.O *lets head drop to the side* I had a dream I stole a car last night. Yes...this is so shocking that's about all I can muster...WOWNESS CHICA! Talk about a new style! I love the incomplete verses, sentences that go on on the next verse, the contradictory colours, the blur, the passion, EVERYTHING! And you can't blame puberty as you're growing out of it...almost. This is PURELY GENIUS! Your genius babe! Bloody rocks and I ADMIRE YOU SO MUCH! You must write more, I adore the new style and this poem just...what was it? Ah, yes: rocks my shizna. Love, Mia
10/23/2004 c1 46inquistrix
lol yes, damn the aussies. good poem though, did you mean for it to sound kinda selfish though? its got an interesting voice. i love your word choice
check my stuff out if you've got the time
iNzaNiTi
46inquistrixlol yes, damn the aussies. good poem though, did you mean for it to sound kinda selfish though? its got an interesting voice. i love your word choice
check my stuff out if you've got the time
iNzaNiTi
10/23/2004 c1 12345678912356789deletedelete
wow. that made me all shivery. Amazing, honestly. I love the way it kinda floats along, dreamlike...and the way it changes like thoughts to. It streams...
"And at times it seemed your fingers tried to resuscitate my soul" That line just really struck me.
I'm loving your new style, keep working with it. (and if anything ever does go wrong, keep blaming the aussies). Thanks for the review, and thanks for posting =)
wow. that made me all shivery. Amazing, honestly. I love the way it kinda floats along, dreamlike...and the way it changes like thoughts to. It streams...
"And at times it seemed your fingers tried to resuscitate my soul" That line just really struck me.
I'm loving your new style, keep working with it. (and if anything ever does go wrong, keep blaming the aussies). Thanks for the review, and thanks for posting =)