for Nothing To Lose11/7/2004 c3 
3Nathan Murray
So far, it seems interesting. The actual scene is pretty engaging. However. The synopsis at the beginning and the character profiles are unnecessary. If you can't tell your story with your story, then you need to work on your style. If you were to just jump right into things, I don't think anybody would miss a beat.
3Nathan MurraySo far, it seems interesting. The actual scene is pretty engaging. However. The synopsis at the beginning and the character profiles are unnecessary. If you can't tell your story with your story, then you need to work on your style. If you were to just jump right into things, I don't think anybody would miss a beat.