2/23/2005 c17 Walter Dash
1. I thought it was very interesting, but as I said before I thought Reiven's initial reactions were strange.

2. The way you write out the thoughts is a style of writing I prefer. I feel more able to understand the character, like I'm getting in his head.

3. Yes; especially in the castle.

4. I understand about the vampire beauty thing. I hope you understand that I didn't mean anything bad when I said that before, it was merely and observation.

5. Jak and Dean give the impression that they've been together a long time.

6. I haven't a friggin' clue.

7. The beauty is a little unnatual seeming, and his gentle manner makes me think he is easily hurt, but I alway's think that about gentle types. I don't have a clue about his mother. I wait for you to enlighten me.

8. After the whole assassin thing I wondered if Jak killed him. That seems unlikely so now I wonder if Kraig mentored him, assuming that Kraig played a protector role for Reiven.

9. ...Enlighten me.

10. Taken ill? Dead? Run off? Kidnaped? Tell me when I get warmer.

2/22/2005 c19 Punkheid
Hey I'm that buddy of Johanna's that sent you mad mails on deviantart about ryuichi, remember? ^^So, to the point! I love this. It's good cos you've drawn it out and made lots of evil little hints that keep the "next page" link busy ;) There were a couple of bits that bugged me; where I thought he accepted things to easily. Like he suddenly thought "oh man I need sleep." even though he'd just been told he was a vampire. I know you explained that later but I guess it just made it seem a little less realistic. That's summat I think you did well; it's quite realistic. An I like Adelle ;)So...I is lookin forward to next installments. =)

2/17/2005 c2 HairyMclary
Lovely descriptions! It's good and very gripping. Excuse me, I need to keep reading!

1/14/2005 c18 starryeyes
This story is beautifully written. The detail is well written and gives me a perfect desciption of beautiful room or person. Kinda hard to believe that (at the time) a thirteen yr old wrote this. My only gripe is that the chapters are too short :(...oh well...I can't wait to find out what's going to happen in the next chapter :D

1/8/2005 c17 Walter Dash
Well, from they way you write it, I get beautiful and pure and maybe a little otherworldly, but I don't really understand what you mean by elusive. You seem to like writing all of your characters in different shades of beauty. I don't think we've seen one ugly person. As for Angel's mother I think she's the sad blonde in the other tapestry. I don't know 'what' she is other than maybe a witch or a seer.

But what I find disturbing is that there was a second wife (Sersha) when everyone assumes that the former wife (Ayama) is still alive. You have a lot of explaining to do. I also can't understand why Reiven hasn't demanded to be sent home, back to his Uncle, or at least to contact his Uncle. I think Reiven should be asking these people that if they are in fact his family, where were they when he was alone and thrown in an orphanage? And lastly when Reiven passed out (I assume) when talking to Jak and Dean was a little disturbing; Reiven was not quite as freaked as the situation called for.

Sorry if I got carried away, but you asked what I thought.

1/1/2005 c14 2Mytheos
Its a bit fast-paced and I didn't like that Jak and Dean had such a complete personality change after just being introduced. But all-in-all I love the story and I love vampires and I'm afraid I'll have to stalk you.

12/12/2004 c9 3Kari- Ryu no Hime
evil laughter? o_O wow, I do that to. I'd glomp you if it wouldn't be an 'impolite mannerism.' xD yeah, I'm feeling a bit crazy, but I luff your stories. *luffs* shee?

sorry for the insanity, I am only just waking up.

I too am thirteen, and yes, the description was fine. :3nod: