for Knife Wounds11/24/2004 c1 ImpySama
I can't imagine where this poem came from, i really cant...
I really like the lines itself and the point is really good (believe me i can relate!) and i think the topic is powerful, but the "stab" thing...thats a lot of stabs! try putting it on alternating lines, or just on the first and last line becuase then it would just add a little touch of "spice", you know, without like overpowering it and making it repetitive and taking away from the overall affect of the poem. So next time, just for constructive criticism, i would recommend not using so many stabs, becuase it would make your pem flow nicer and sound better. just to tell you, because i want my really poetic twinny to be at the very poetic best! I mean, but thats just how I felt when reading it and my thoughts, but i dunno maybe some people love it and think the whole multi-linned beginning thing is stylin ^_^;; like chadwick or someone. my metro perchance.
but anyways, its good, and oh yes, i TOTALLY feel for you, and you get the point across mucho bien.
I can't imagine where this poem came from, i really cant...
I really like the lines itself and the point is really good (believe me i can relate!) and i think the topic is powerful, but the "stab" thing...thats a lot of stabs! try putting it on alternating lines, or just on the first and last line becuase then it would just add a little touch of "spice", you know, without like overpowering it and making it repetitive and taking away from the overall affect of the poem. So next time, just for constructive criticism, i would recommend not using so many stabs, becuase it would make your pem flow nicer and sound better. just to tell you, because i want my really poetic twinny to be at the very poetic best! I mean, but thats just how I felt when reading it and my thoughts, but i dunno maybe some people love it and think the whole multi-linned beginning thing is stylin ^_^;; like chadwick or someone. my metro perchance.
but anyways, its good, and oh yes, i TOTALLY feel for you, and you get the point across mucho bien.
11